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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.17

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 17
Going to shopping was a chore, but recently it has become a leisure activity and a hobby. People used to take shopping as burden, however, these days it is considered as a recreational activity which helps rejuvenate. In my opinion, I think it is a positive development. In this essay, I will give possible illustrations for the same. For earlier generations, shopping was acknowledged as a task, it entails effort and time to do it. However, nowadays, this is not the case. People enjoy shopping so much that they have started setting up specific days for it. For example, in India families tend to go shopping every month and buy variety of clothes. It keeps the mind healthy and provide a sense of satisfaction and for girls it is a very important as they have to keep themselves up with the ongoing fashion. These days, parents are working full time, they hardly have any time to spend it with the family. So, people try to go shopping together and enjoy its benefits. For instance, a study showed that the family who shop together is more likely to have good bonding. People spend time with each other and also have dinner together, which helps a family get closer. Nevertheless, this is not ideal, especially if it leaves no time for other activities, such as sport. To conclude, shopping was considered as a laborious job, people often tend to delay this activity, but clearly now a day it is very crucial for people as they enjoy it. Fashion industries are definitely responsible for changing people’s behaviour. In my opinion, I believe shopping is a positive trend to a great extent and have a huge market ahead.
Going to
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shopping
was a chore,
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but
recently it has become a leisure
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activity
and a hobby.
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People
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used
to take
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shopping
as burden,
however
, these days it
is considered
as a recreational
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activity
which
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helps
rejuvenate. In my opinion, I
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think
it is a
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positive
development. In this essay, I will give possible illustrations for the same.

For earlier generations,
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shopping
was acknowledged
as a task, it entails effort and
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time
to do it.
However
, nowadays, this is not the case.
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People
enjoy
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shopping
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so
much that they have
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started
setting up specific days for it.
For example
, in India
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families
tend to go
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shopping
every month and
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buy
variety of clothes. It
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keeps
the mind healthy and provide a sense of satisfaction and for girls it is a
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very
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important
as they
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have to
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keep
themselves up with the ongoing fashion.

These days, parents are working full
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time
, they hardly have any
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time
to spend it with the
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family
.
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So
,
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people
try to go
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shopping
together and enjoy its benefits.
For instance
, a study
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showed
that the
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family
who shop together is more likely to have
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good
bonding.
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People
spend
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time
with each other and
also
have dinner together, which
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helps
a
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family
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get
closer.
Nevertheless
, this is not ideal,
especially
if it
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leaves
no
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time
for other
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activities
, such as sport.

To conclude
,
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shopping
was considered
as a laborious job,
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people
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often
tend to delay this
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activity
,
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but
clearly
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now
a day it is
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very
crucial for
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people
as they enjoy it. Fashion industries are definitely responsible for changing
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people’s
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
. In my opinion, I believe
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shopping
is a
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positive
trend to a great extent and have a huge market ahead.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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