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Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. v. 6
One of the most controversial issues today is, whether it is a wise decision to gift money to youngsters or not. In this essay, we will discuss both sides, along with the evidence on why it is not a great idea to provide cash as a present. On one side of the argument, there are people who support that giving monetary gifts to teens is good. The main reason for this is that it is more adequate because teenagers can buy any items according to their choice from that gifted amount. Youth these days are very much picky on what they want or they do not want. Therefore, it is simple for the person who is gifting to provide cash so that the child can get themselves the present of their choice. For instance, if a school going teen is gifted cash, they can invest in things that are useful for them for education or learning. On the other hand, it can have an adverse impact as well. Minors can sometimes not be the right decision-maker and may end up spending on a health hazardous substance. Seeing money can make some teenagers tempt to purchase items that can lead them to a worse path in life. For example, if a youngster who does not acknowledge the meaning of the present may end up buying addictive things like drugs or cigarettes. Hence, providing money as a gift, can sometimes be harmful to youths. In conclusion, both arguments have their merits. However, in my perspective, gifting money to teenagers can sometimes lead them towards the wrong path as they are still minors and are not mature enough to make a decision for themselves.
One of the most controversial issues
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today
is, whether it is a wise decision to gift
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money
to youngsters or not. In this essay, we will discuss both sides, along with the evidence on why it is not a great
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idea
to provide cash as a present.

On one side of the argument, there are
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people
who support that giving monetary gifts to teens is
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good
. The main reason for this is that it is more adequate
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because
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teenagers
can
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buy
any items according to their choice from that gifted amount. Youth these days are
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very
much picky on what they
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want or
they do not want.
Therefore
, it is simple for the person who is gifting to provide cash
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so
that the child can
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get
themselves the present of their choice.
For instance
, if a school going teen
is gifted
cash, they can invest in things that are useful for them for education or learning.

On the other hand
, it can have an adverse impact
as well
. Minors can
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sometimes
not be the right decision-maker and may
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end
up spending on a health hazardous substance. Seeing
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money
can
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make
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some
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teenagers
tempt to
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purchase
items that can lead them to a worse path in life.
For example
, if a youngster who does not acknowledge the meaning of the present may
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end
up buying addictive things like drugs or cigarettes.
Hence
, providing
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money
as a gift, can
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sometimes
be harmful to youths.

In conclusion
, both arguments have their merits.
However
, in my perspective, gifting
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money
to
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teenagers
can
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sometimes
lead them towards the
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wrong
path as they are
still
minors and are not mature
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enough
to
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make
a decision for themselves.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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