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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v.48

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 48
Recently, due to urbanization, there has been a significant increase in demand for new houses. A group of individuals thinks that it is necessary to save countryside by not constructing new houses. In my opinion, it is better to conserve rural places and build new homes in urban areas only. To embark on, rural areas helps to protect the environment. This is because trees, clean the polluted air emerging from vehicles and industries located in developed cities. If these plants are chopped off for construction of new homes, then pollution will increase and thus affecting the health of individuals. For example, toxic fumes such as carbon monoxide coming from motor car get cleaned by plants. In a survey conducted by The Times, the air quality of the London decreased by twenty percent because of the modernization of fifty percent of rural areas near its vicinity. Secondly, undeveloped areas provide necessary foods to the city. This is because farmers located in these areas grow fruits and vegetables and supply to cities. This is why the food demand of people located in developed cities is met. For an instance, as per the result of a survey conducted by the economist, it published that ninety percent of the food demand in almost all the countries are met due to farming done in nearby areas. Furthermore, farming also helps in maintaining proper ecosystem of the place. To summarize, it seems that it is better to save and maintain the nature’s ecosystem by conserving inhabitable and it also protects the environment by reducing carbon footprint created by human beings.
Recently, due to urbanization, there has been a significant increase in demand for
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new
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houses
. A group of individuals
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thinks
that it is necessary to save countryside by not constructing
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new
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houses
. In my opinion, it is better to conserve rural places and build
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new
homes in urban
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areas
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only
.

To embark on, rural
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areas
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helps
to protect the environment. This is
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because
trees, clean the polluted air emerging from vehicles and industries located in developed
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cities
. If these plants
are chopped
off for construction of
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new
homes, then pollution will increase and
thus
affecting the health of individuals.
For example
, toxic fumes such as carbon monoxide coming from motor car
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get
cleaned by plants. In a survey conducted by The Times, the air quality of the London decreased by twenty percent
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because
of the modernization of fifty percent of rural
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areas
near its vicinity.

Secondly
, undeveloped
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areas
provide necessary foods to the city. This is
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because
farmers located in these
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areas
grow fruits and vegetables and supply to
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cities
. This is why the food demand of
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people
located in developed
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cities
is met
. For an instance, as per the result of a survey conducted by the economist, it published that ninety percent of the food demand in almost all the countries
are met
due to farming done in nearby
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areas
.
Furthermore
, farming
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in maintaining proper ecosystem of the place.

To summarize
, it seems that it is better to save and maintain the nature’s ecosystem by conserving inhabitable and it
also
protects the environment by reducing carbon footprint created by human beings.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 48

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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