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Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. v. 5
There is often a dichotomy in opinion on whether money should be given as a present or not to adolescents. Few feels that it is good while others have contradictory views. Firstly, these days teenagers have a different type of choices for gifts, such as, digital games and electronic gadgets while older people may not have much knowledge about it. Therefore, the adults may purchase simple traditional gifts, which might not be liked by them. Therefore, money could be the best option for presenting to the young so that they may buy their preferred products. Secondly, it can be seen that when a person purchases a gift then he or she may not check all the features as well as material while buying it and it may be useless for the receiver. Hence, money should be given to teenagers,   so that they can buy anything after checking all the pros and cons of the product. For instance, when I was in high school, my uncle gifted a watch to me which did not have the modern features like stop watch or world clock and I was not happy with it. Nevertheless, gifts are reminders and whenever a person looks at a present then he or she remembers the person who presented it and therefore Cash as a gift cannot take the place of gifts in kind because people often forget about cash presents. For example, I remember my brother whenever I see the sports shoes he gifted for my first marathon. In conclusion, according to me, though people give cash as a gift to teenagers but purchasing a product instead, will generate more feelings of love and closeness
There is
often
a dichotomy in opinion on whether money should be
given
as a present or not to adolescents. Few feels that it is
good
while others have contradictory views.

Firstly
, these days
teenagers
have a
different
type of choices for
gifts
, such as, digital games and electronic gadgets while older
people
may not have much knowledge about it.
Therefore
, the adults may
purchase
simple traditional
gifts
, which might not
be liked
by them.
Therefore
, money could be the best option for presenting to the young
so
that they may
buy
their preferred products.

Secondly
, it can be
seen
that when a person
purchases
a
gift
then he or she may not
check
all the features
as well
as material while buying it and it may be useless for the receiver.
Hence
, money should be
given
to
teenagers
,
 
so
that they can
buy
anything after checking all the pros and cons of the product.
For instance
, when I was in high school, my uncle gifted a
watch
to me which did not have the modern features like
stop
watch
or world
clock and
I was not happy with it.

Nevertheless
,
gifts
are reminders and whenever a person looks at a present then he or she remembers the person who presented it and
therefore
Cash as a
gift
cannot take the place of
gifts
in kind
because
people
often
forget about cash presents.
For example
, I remember my brother whenever I
see
the sports shoes he gifted for my
first
marathon.

In conclusion
, according to me, though
people
give cash as a
gift
to
teenagers
but
purchasing a product
instead
, will generate more feelings of
love
and closeness
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
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