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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.13

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 13
The issue of foreigners paying more for cultural and historical visits is widely debated in todays world. In my view, it is not clear whether the visitors should be changed more or not when visiting the local historical places, as I have different attitudes towards this issue. On one hand, the reason why foreign customers pay more is because local people already pay taxes, including the fees for repairing the sites. Repairing cultural and historical areas is essential for their protection, moreover, they will be destroyed or lost. In order to renew the sites, governments need to provide a fund that is accumulated from the public for several years. As I see it, governments will benefit the local public with cheaper prices for visiting these areas. On the other hand, some point out that foreign visitors should not pay more, because this may result in a drawback for a local economy. The reason is that the visitors will not decide to visit a country when they find out that they need to pay more than local people. A good example illustrating this point is that the majority of visitors will not go to historical sites in Malaysia, such as Malaysia Istana, because they feel it is unfair to pay more than local Malaysians. Consequently, this trend can result in economic risk for Malaysia. In conclusion, local visitors should pay less because they are paying taxes, while tourists should not pay more which would give a bad image of the country. In my opinion, I tend to disagree with the proposition that foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors.
The issue of foreigners paying more for cultural and
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historical
visits is
widely
debated in
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todays
world. In my view, it is not
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clear
whether the
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visitors
should be
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changed
more or not when visiting the
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local
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historical
places, as I have
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different
attitudes towards this issue.

On one hand, the reason why foreign customers
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pay
more is
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because
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local
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people
already
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pay
taxes, including the fees for repairing the sites. Repairing cultural and
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historical
areas is essential for their protection,
moreover
, they will be
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destroyed
or lost. In order to renew the sites,
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governments
need to provide a fund that
is accumulated
from the public for several years. As I
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see
it,
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governments
will benefit the
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local
public with cheaper prices for visiting these areas.

On the other hand
,
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some
point out that foreign
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visitors
should not
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pay
more,
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because
this may result in a drawback for a
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local
economy. The reason is that the
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visitors
will not decide to visit a country when they find out that they need to
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pay
more than
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local
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people
. A
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good
example illustrating this point is that the majority of
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visitors
will not go to
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historical
sites in Malaysia, such as Malaysia
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Istana
,
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because
they feel it is unfair to
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pay
more than
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local
Malaysians.
Consequently
, this trend can result in economic
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risk
for Malaysia.

In conclusion
,
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local
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visitors
should
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pay
less
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because
they are paying taxes, while tourists should not
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pay
more which would give a
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bad
image of the country. In my opinion, I tend to disagree with the proposition that foreign
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visitors
should
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pay
more than
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local
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visitors
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
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IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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