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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than local when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.1

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than local when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 1
Cultural and tourist attractions are representing a country. A few numbers of people claim that international tourists should be paid more money than local citizens to visit cultural and historical tourist places. In my point of view, I do not agree with this view if the differences are quite low between local and international tourists it should be the proper judgment. Every country has many cultural and tourist attractions. Local people spent their pleasure time with their family or friends to go to tourist attractions. Some tourist spots need to care and repair. So, these sites have a ticket system. Every person needs a ticket to entry these spots. But most of the countries have a rule for international tourists. They demand a very higher ticket price than local visitors. Sometimes, the amount is very excess than local peoples. For example, my brother and his friends were going to India. They went to the Tajmahal for visiting. But when they were going to enter that place, they need tickets. The ticket price was 100 Indian rupees for local tourists but international tourists, the ticket price was 500 Indian rupees per person which is 5 times higher than a local ticket. At last, they paid 500 rupees for each ticket and enter to the Tajmahal. On the other hand, many cultural and tourist spots need proper caring and repairing. A large number of amount needs to fix it. Authority decides to a ticket system to enter to the spots. The ticket price is the same as local and international tourists. Every week a large number of tourists go there to spend their time, so the authority income much money from the ticket. They do not need to extra money from international visitors. If they do, they can increase a small amount of money for every ticket. International tourists can focus on our historical Tourist spots. Suppose, in our country has many tourist spots. Some spots have a ticket system, but all the ticket prices are the same. So foreign tourists cannot face any problem in visiting this site. In conclusion, foreign visitors help to country's GDP growth and they represent the tourist spot in different countries where they are going. In my opinion, foreign tourists should be charged the same as local citizens. This way gives a positive impact on a country and many international tourists come here every time.
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attractions are representing a
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country
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people
claim that
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international
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local
citizens to visit
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cultural
and historical
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places. In my point of view, I do not
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agree
with this view if the differences are quite low between
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and
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tourists
it should be the proper judgment.

Every
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country
has
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many
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cultural
and
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tourist
attractions.
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Local
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people
spent their pleasure
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time
with their family or friends to go to
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attractions.
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Some
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spots
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need
to care and repair.
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, these sites have a
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system. Every person
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to entry these
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spots
.
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most of the
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countries
have a
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rule
for
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international
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tourists
. They demand a
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very
higher
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ticket
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price
than
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local
visitors.
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Sometimes
, the amount is
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excess
than
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peoples.
For example
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Tajmahal
for visiting.
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when they were going to enter that place, they
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need
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tickets
. The
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ticket
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price
was 100 Indian rupees for
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local
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tourists
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but
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international
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tourists
, the
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ticket
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price
was 500 Indian rupees per person which is 5
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times
higher than a
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local
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ticket
. At last, they paid 500 rupees for each
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and enter to the
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Tajmahal
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,
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cultural
and
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tourist
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spots
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need
proper caring and repairing.
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A large number of
amount
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needs
to
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fix
it. Authority decides to a
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ticket
system to enter to the
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spots
. The
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ticket
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price
is the same as
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local
and
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international
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tourists
. Every week
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a large number of
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go there to spend their
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time
,
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the authority income much
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money
from the
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ticket
. They do not
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need
to extra
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money
from
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international
visitors. If they do, they can increase a
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small
amount of
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money
for every
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ticket
.
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International
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tourists
can focus on our historical

Tourist
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spots
. Suppose, in our
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country
has
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many
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tourist
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spots
.
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Some
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have a
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system,
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all the
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ticket
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prices
are the same.
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foreign
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tourists
cannot face any problem in visiting this site.

In conclusion
, foreign visitors
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help
to country's GDP
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growth and
they represent the
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tourist
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spot
in
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different
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countries
where they are going. In my opinion, foreign
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tourists
should
be charged
the same as
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local
citizens. This way gives a
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positive
impact on a
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country
and
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many
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international
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come
here every
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
87Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than local when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
399 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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