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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.7

Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. v. 7
These days people are conscious about their heath and follow different patterns for a healthier lifestyle. While some people believe that exercise plays the major role for a human body, others feel that if a healthy dietary pattern is followed consistently, it can be least prioritized. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide inferences as to why a balanced meal should be given more importance. To begin with, exercise is considered as the most important physical activity for humans irrespective of their age. Also, workout keeps a person's mind refreshed. For instance, any physical work like running in fresh air tends to breathe in more oxygen which is very effective in relieving mental pressure. In addition, unlike heavy gymnasium equipments, yoga is a classic example which an individual of every age group can practise and benefit from it. Thus, physical workout is considered a key to healthy life and balanced mind. Nonetheless, a balanced diet consisting of proportionate carbohydrates and proteins has always been a shortcut to good health because these practices have been followed since old times when cardio activities like aerobics, power yoga were not known. I second the fact that physical activity helps when a person consumes healthy food. To illustrate, many youngsters have started going to the gym to build their muscles, but this will not be effective unless they eat protein rich substances. Hence, it cannot be denied, that the cardiovascular movements are very good for health, but this can also jeopardize a healthy man if meal consisting of variant substances are not consumed. In conclusion, nutritious food and physical exercise both are of equal importance to maintain a balanced life. Looking at the inferences discussed above, we can clearly state that they both go hand in hand. However, a slight priority must be given to one's diet, such that he/she can build their physique to challenge any type of physical work.
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people
are conscious about their heath and follow
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different
patterns for a healthier lifestyle. While
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some
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people
believe that exercise plays the major role for a human body, others feel that if a
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healthy
dietary pattern
is followed
consistently
, it can be least prioritized. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide inferences as to why a
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balanced
meal should be
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given
more importance.

To
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begin
with, exercise
is considered
as the most
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important
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physical
activity for humans irrespective of their age.
Also
, workout
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keeps
a person's mind refreshed.
For instance
, any
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physical
work like running in fresh air tends to breathe in more oxygen which is
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very
effective in relieving mental pressure.
In addition
, unlike heavy gymnasium equipments, yoga is a classic example which an individual of every age group can
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practise
and benefit from it.
Thus
,
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physical
workout
is considered
a key to
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healthy
life and
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balanced
mind.

Nonetheless, a
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balanced
diet consisting of proportionate carbohydrates and proteins has always been a shortcut to
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good
health
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because
these practices have
been followed
since
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old
times when cardio activities like aerobics, power yoga were not known. I second the fact that
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physical
activity
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helps
when a person consumes
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healthy
food. To illustrate,
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many
youngsters have
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started
going to the gym to build their muscles,
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but
this will not be effective unless they eat protein rich substances.
Hence
, it cannot
be denied
, that the cardiovascular movements are
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very
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good
for health,
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but
this can
also
jeopardize a
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healthy
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man
if meal consisting of variant substances are not consumed.

In conclusion
, nutritious food and
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physical
exercise both are of equal importance to maintain a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
balanced
life. Looking at the inferences discussed above, we can
clearly
state that they both go hand in hand.
However
, a slight priority
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to one's diet, such that he/she can build their physique to challenge any type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
work.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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