Everyone deserves the right to get admission in colleges and universities. It is argued that students belong to high society as well as lower class find problem to get entry into universities for study. I do not agree with the statement and discuss my opinion in following paragraphs.
At present, the primary goal of almost every private educational institution has become to earn more and more money. Therefore, it is easier for students who belong to rich families to get entry into universities because they are able to pay as much money as the university wants. Moreover, high class families have strong connections to charities, fundraisers or university's employees. As a result, they work as reference for rich family students to enter into universities for further education.
In the contrast, getting admission in reputed university or college become the situation of do or die for students who belong to poor families. To quench this thirst, they have to put their all the endeavours such as getting high scores, win prizes in study or activities in order to get scholarships at prominent educational institutes. The statistics reveal that most of the poor students have to drop out from universities when they are not able to pay fees. Due to the lack of money, they become unable to fulfil their dream of getting educated in the desired university or college.
To recapitulate, educational centres should pay heed to admissions on the basis of the potential and the marks of the students instead money.
Everyone deserves the right to
get
admission in colleges and
universities
. It
is argued
that
students
belong to high society
as well
as lower
class
find problem to
get
entry into
universities
for study. I do not
agree
with the statement and discuss my opinion in following paragraphs.
At present, the primary goal of almost every private educational institution has become to earn more and more
money
.
Therefore
, it is easier for
students
who belong to rich
families
to
get
entry into
universities
because
they are able to pay as much
money
as the
university
wants.
Moreover
, high
class
families
have strong connections to charities, fundraisers or university's employees.
As a result
, they work as reference for rich
family
students
to enter into
universities
for
further
education.
In the contrast, getting admission in reputed
university
or college become the situation of do or
die
for
students
who belong to poor
families
. To quench this thirst, they
have to
put their all the
endeavours
such as getting high scores, win prizes in study or activities in order to
get
scholarships at prominent educational institutes. The statistics reveal that most of the poor
students
have to
drop out from
universities
when they are not able to pay fees. Due to the lack of
money
, they become unable to fulfil their dream of getting educated in the desired
university
or college.
To recapitulate, educational
centres
should pay heed to admissions on the basis of the potential and the marks of the
students
instead
money
.
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