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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.16

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally v. 16
The environment has become the most concerned issue these days around the globe. It is argued by some that these issues should be resolved at an international level. However, others believe that it should be dealt at the state level. In my opinion, this issue can only be solved if all the countries work together. I am going to discuss both sides of the argument in the following paragraphs. On one side, there are reasons why all the countries should tackle this issue. To begin with, there are many countries going through same environmental problems, but due to different reasons. For instance, Australia faces the challenge of land-degradation may be due to over-grazing, whereas Indonesia facing the same challenge because of deforestation. Therefore, those states might plan appropriate plans to overcome this problem. On the other hand, the alternative suggestion to overcome nature's problem globally seems like much more likely to be effective in practice. One obvious example of global warming, which has detrimental impact worldwide. Therefore, collaboration and agreement needed to be done by all the countries in the world to tackle it. Apparently, the developing countries may not have that much experience to tackle these problems. Also, it is the duty of the developed countries to help these countries, so that globally countries can make the earth better again. To sum up, although it may seem easier to solve the environmental problems nationally, in practice, dealing with these issues would be more effective when working on a global scale.
The environment has become the most concerned
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these days around the globe. It
is argued
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that these
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issues
should
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at an international level.
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, others believe that it should
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at the state level. In my opinion, this
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issue
can
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only
be solved
if all the
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countries
work together. I am going to discuss both sides of the argument in the following paragraphs.

On one side, there are reasons why all the
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countries
should tackle this
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issue
. To
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begin
with, there are
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many
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countries
going through same environmental
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,
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but
due to
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different
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For instance
, Australia faces the challenge of land-degradation may be due to over-grazing, whereas Indonesia facing the same challenge
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because
of deforestation.
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, those states might plan appropriate plans to overcome this problem.

On the other hand
, the alternative suggestion to overcome nature's
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problem
globally seems like much more likely to be effective in practice. One obvious example of global warming, which has detrimental impact worldwide.
Therefore
, collaboration and agreement needed to
be done
by all the
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countries
in the world to tackle it.
Apparently
, the developing
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countries
may not have that much experience to tackle these
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problems
.
Also
, it is the duty of the developed
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countries
to
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help
these
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countries
,
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so
that globally
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countries
can
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make
the earth better again.

To sum up, although it may seem easier to solve the environmental
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problems
nationally
, in practice, dealing with these
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issues
would be more effective when working on a global scale.
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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