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Some people think that environment problem should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss the both the sides and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that environment problem should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss the both the sides and give your opinion v. 1
While some people believe that ecological issues should be solved globally, others feel that it should be solved nationally. I believe that although it is a global issue; solutions, such as regulations and campaigns can be introduced at national level. To begin with, there are a few reasons why some people think that it is a worldwide issue. Firstly, the environment affects people around the world, regardless of its nation. One apparent example is the infamous global warming where it affects every place on earth by the increasing temperature and sea level. Secondly, nature behaviour is not limited to just a country; For example, seasonal birds that migrate from a colder to a warmer place across several countries. All the above are the examples of problems that we encounter today. On the other hands, I believe that each nation can play a part to reduce these problems. In the first place, the government could launch a nationwide campaign to raise public awareness about these ecological issues. For instance, a nationwide ban on plastic usage, which has been an effective way to reduce plastic waste. Another way forward could be by protecting the natural forest, in conjunction with the objectives to reduce immediate problems, such as food chain interruption that may lead to certain extinction of animals of plants. In conclusion, environmental problem may seem to be a global scale issue, however, dealing with these issues can be started at the national scale. I personally believe that every government need to resolve this nationally and contribute as part of global resolution.
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that although it is a
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; solutions, such as regulations and campaigns can
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.
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, the environment affects
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people
around the world, regardless of its nation. One apparent example is the infamous
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global
warming where it affects every place on earth by the increasing temperature and sea level.
Secondly
, nature
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behaviour
is not limited to
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a country;
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, seasonal birds that migrate from a colder to a warmer place across several countries. All the above are the examples of
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problems
that we encounter
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today
.

On the other hands, I
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believe
that each nation can play a part to
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these
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problems
. In the
first
place, the
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government
could launch a nationwide campaign to raise public awareness about these ecological
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issues
.
For instance
, a nationwide ban on plastic usage, which has been an effective way to
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reduce
plastic waste. Another way forward could be by protecting the natural forest, in conjunction with the objectives to
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reduce
immediate
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problems
, such as food chain interruption that may lead to certain extinction of animals of plants.

In conclusion
, environmental
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problem
may seem to be a
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global
scale
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issue
,
however
, dealing with these
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can be
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started
at the national scale. I
personally
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believe
that every
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government
need to resolve this
nationally
and contribute as part of
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global
resolution.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that environment problem should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss the both the sides and give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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