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Some people say that in all levels of education, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Some people say that in all levels of education, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 5
In the field of learning, it is very important to have a balanced structure of topics and keynotes. Even though there are many subjects which can be taught through theory, but at the same time practical education is also playing a vital role. I am totally agree with the viewpoint that practise makes man perfect which is lacking in current learnings and thus this essay will be having both the aspects of classroom and field teaching along with my viewpoints. Firstly, there is a well-known phrase that one cannot learn swimming unless jumping into the river. Additionally, what if we learn only textbook sentences about swimming. We will never get to know the hurdles which can be faced in the event of real life. But unfortunately, today's scenario is much more focusing on getting good results rather than keeping a practical knowledge aside. I would like to add more light that it is now changing, but at a tortoise rate. Secondly, on the other hand, what if we have students having only textbook knowledge? They cannot even face the difficulties because of unawareness towards practical solutions for any give circumstances. For instance, taking the same example of swimming, one cannot start learning at the banks of the river just before jumping into it. This shows the mirror to the current system of any state or country. With these kind of education, no country can either develop or ready for future growth. So, there is a state of need to change the entire education system. In the end, Practical knowledge, having equal or more importance in life at any stage. So in conclusion, I am totally leaning towards the viewpoint about having less priority to real life practise. Because of many surveys and white papers published to bring this topic in the mainstream, the government is about to restructure the system but the changes are yet to be seen.
In the field of learning, it is
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very
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important
to have a balanced structure of topics and keynotes.
Even though
there are
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many
subjects which can
be taught
through theory,
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but
at the same time
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practical
education is
also
playing a vital role. I am
totally
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agree
with the viewpoint that
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practise
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makes
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man
perfect which is lacking in
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current
learnings and
thus
this essay will be
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having
both the aspects of classroom and field teaching along with my viewpoints.

Firstly
, there is a well-known phrase that one cannot learn
If 'learn' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to swim".
swimming
unless jumping into the river.
Additionally
, what if we learn
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only
textbook sentences about swimming. We will never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know the hurdles which can
be faced
in the
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event
of real life.
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But
unfortunately,
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today
's scenario is much more focusing on getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
results
rather
than keeping a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
knowledge aside. I would like to
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add
more light that it is
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now
changing,
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but
at a tortoise rate.

Secondly
,
on the other hand
, what if we have students
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having
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
textbook knowledge? They cannot even face the difficulties
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of unawareness towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
solutions for any give circumstances.
For instance
, taking the same example of swimming, one cannot
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start
learning at the banks of the river
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just
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before
jumping into it. This
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shows
the mirror to the
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current
system of any state or country. With
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of education, no country can either develop or ready for future growth.
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So
, there is a state of need to
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change
the entire education system.

In the
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end
,
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Practical
knowledge,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
equal or more importance in life at any stage.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
in conclusion
, I am
totally
leaning towards the viewpoint about
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having
less priority to real life
Possible spelling mistake. 'practise' is British English.
practise
.
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Because
of
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many
surveys and white papers published to bring this topic in the mainstream, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is about to restructure the system
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but
the
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changes
are
yet
to be
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seen
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
8.5
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