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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.1

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1
This essay is about the job satisfaction, todays in our society. Its main purpose is to elaborate the reason behind the unsatisfactory job in our lives. In which we will discuss on different parameters relevant to job satisfaction. The main idea behind our discussion is to find out the actual reason to overcome this issue in our professional lives. There could be several reasons’ of not being satisfied with the job. Especially while you will be handling other parameters in life a long hectic routine life. Hence, it’s extremely important in everyone’s life to be satisfied in their professional life because as I believe it has a direct impact on our personal life. It’s very realistic and common in most of our lives, when we are not satisfied with our jobs either in terms of salary, environment or strict office environment’ we could not live healthy and happy life with our families. Because the unhappy job makes us depressed and always tensed and we will be always thinking to move on to other jobs, to rid of the problem. In general, many people are losing hope and their determination to work. So firstly, to be satisfied with their job environment I believe we should spend the required time in office as its expected from the employers, and apply our maximum efforts to complete our job on time. Secondly, we should be ready for rapid changes to adopt, in the fastest growing industries to survive and compete the required skills. To conclude, Although, it’s primarily important for adults to manage their professional life in a balanced way. As we already have discussed about the different factors which are quite important for job satisfaction. In my opinion, the obvious factor is not being satisfied is, unscheduled work, delay and sometimes non-competencies in the workplace. Which are definitely fixable by giving attention on the employers, and providing them required training
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satisfaction,
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todays
in our society. Its main purpose is to elaborate the reason behind the unsatisfactory
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job
in our
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lives
. In which we will discuss on
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different
parameters relevant to
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job
satisfaction.

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idea
behind our discussion is to find out the actual reason to overcome this issue in our professional
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lives
. There could be several reasons’ of not being
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satisfied
with the
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job
.
Especially
while you will be handling other parameters in
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life
a long hectic routine life.

Hence
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in everyone’s
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life
to be
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in their professional
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life
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because
as I believe it has a direct impact on our personal
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life
. It’s
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realistic and common in most of our
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, when we are not
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with our
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jobs
either in terms of salary, environment or strict office environment’ we could not
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live
healthy and happy
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life
with our families.
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the unhappy
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job
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us depressed and always
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tensed and
we will be always thinking to
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on to other
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, to rid of the problem.
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,
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many
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people
are losing hope and their determination to work.
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firstly
, to be
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satisfied
with their
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job
environment I believe we should spend the required time in office as its
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expected
from the employers, and apply our maximum efforts to complete our
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job
on time.
Secondly
, we should be ready for rapid
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changes
to adopt, in the fastest growing industries to survive and compete the required
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skills
.

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, Although, it’s
primarily
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important
for adults to manage their professional
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life
in a balanced way. As we already have
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discussed about the
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different
factors which are quite
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important
for
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job
satisfaction. In my opinion, the obvious factor is not being
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satisfied
is, unscheduled work, delay and
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sometimes
non-competencies in the workplace. Which are definitely fixable by giving attention on the employers, and providing them required
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training
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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