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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. 1
Spending public funds for the development of other countries is a hotly debated topic these days. While some people argue that international organizations should help thirdworld countries financially, others believe that they should be provided with practical help and advice instead. In my view, it is more important to assist poor countries in practical way. On the one hand, some people say that financial help is crucial in bringing development in a country. The developing nations are well aware of the problems they face, and, thus, know how to solve those problems. In fact, they have complete and effective plans on where and how to spend the money they receive from international organizations. Indeed, every citizen of a country knows all the obstacles in their nation’s development. Therefore, they should be given financial assistance so that they candevelop their countries according to their own ambitions. On the other hand, others opine that practical aid is more important for developing nations than financial aid. Third world countries often do not understand how to efficiently spend the money they receive from others. As a result, mismanagement offunds occurs, and donations or public money is wasted. Instead, the organizations that work for the development of poor countries on the global level should provide practical assistance to them. This will not only assist the developing nations in overcoming the hurdles, which they do not understand how to solve, in their development, but will also avoid any chances of funds embezzlement or mismanagement. In conclusion, people have contradictory views on whether to help poor countries financially or practically. In my opinion, practical skills should be imparted to these nations, so that they can contribute to their country’s development and learn techniques that could help them in future as well.
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countries
is a
hotly
debated topic these days. While
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some
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people
argue that international organizations should
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help
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thirdworld
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countries
financially
, others believe that they should
be provided
with
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practical
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help
and advice
instead
. In my view, it is more
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important
to assist poor
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countries
in
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practical
way.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
say that financial
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help
is crucial in bringing
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development
in a
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country
. The developing
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nations
are well aware of the problems they face, and,
thus
, know how to solve those problems. In fact, they have complete and effective plans on where and how to spend the money they receive from international organizations.
Indeed
, every citizen of a
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country
knows all the obstacles in their
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nation’s
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development
.
Therefore
, they should be
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given
financial assistance
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so
that they
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candevelop
their
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countries
according to their
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own
ambitions.

On the
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other
hand, others opine that
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practical
aid is more
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important
for developing
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nations
than financial aid. Third world
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countries
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often
do not understand how to
efficiently
spend the money they receive from others.
As a result
, mismanagement
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offunds
occurs, and donations or public money
is wasted
.
Instead
, the organizations that work for the
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development
of poor
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countries
on the global level should provide
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practical
assistance to them. This will not
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only
assist the developing
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nations
in overcoming the hurdles, which they do not understand how to solve, in their
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development
,
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but
will
also
avoid any chances of funds embezzlement or mismanagement.

In conclusion
,
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people
have contradictory views on whether to
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help
poor
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countries
financially
or
practically
. In my opinion,
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practical
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skills
should
be imparted
to these
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nations
,
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so
that they can contribute to their
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country’s
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development
and learn techniques that could
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help
them in future
as well
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
294 words
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