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Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibilities to climate change than developing countries. others believe countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. discuss both sides and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibilities to climate change than developing countries. others believe countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. 1
Environmental pollution is a universal problem so, according to some people, both the developing and developed countries should have equal responsibilities towards protecting the environment, while others believe, the developed nations should bear the major burden to protecting the atmosphere. In my opinion, the advanced nations with better economic conditions are more responsible for protecting the atmosphere. It is argued by some people that the developed nations are more responsible to combat against the climate change because they have the financial capability. In other words, their better economic conditions allow them to allocate a portion of the budget for the environmental safety projects. In addition, they can make contributions towards international environmental friendly NGO`s. These non governmental organisations basically chart out plans for the safety of atmosphere. For instance, European countries are the biggest contributors for green peace and United Nations Environmental control programme. The proponents of this notion believe that if developing countries start contributing towards environmental protection programmes, then they will have to cut down finances of more important sectors like education and health. Hence, for the poor countries it is not a viable option. Those who believe that both rich and poor countries should be equally responsible for struggle against climate change argue that pollution is a global problem and it can not be worked out in isolation. They argue since all the countries in the world are equally responsible for the spread of pollution, why the responsibility should be given to few nations. For example, if poor countries cannot provide financial assistance, they can be of great assistance in implementing the environmental protection laws like limiting the use of cars or proper disposal of wastes from factories. Hence, rich and poor should join hands in battle against climate change. In conclusion, I agree with the opinion that rich countries should be more responsible to struggle against the environmental changes as they can afford it while the poor countries should deal with their internal problems.
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, according to
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, both the developing and developed
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should have equal responsibilities towards protecting the environment, while others believe, the developed
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should bear the major burden to protecting the atmosphere. In my opinion, the advanced
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nations
with better economic conditions are more
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for protecting the atmosphere.

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is argued
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that the developed
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are more
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to combat against the climate
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they have the financial capability.
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, their better economic conditions
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allow
them to allocate a portion of the budget for the
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safety projects.
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make
contributions towards international
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friendly
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basically
chart out plans for the safety of atmosphere.
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are the biggest contributors for green peace and United
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control
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. The proponents of this notion believe that if developing
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protection
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sectors like education and health.
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poor
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it is not a viable option.

Those who believe that both rich and
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poor
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countries
should be
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responsible
for struggle against climate
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argue that pollution is a global problem and it can not
be worked
out in isolation. They argue since all the
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countries
in the world are
equally
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responsible
for the spread of pollution, why the responsibility should be
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.
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, if
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poor
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countries
cannot provide financial assistance, they can be of great assistance in implementing the
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environmental
protection laws like limiting the
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use
of cars or proper disposal of wastes from factories.
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, rich and
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poor
should
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join
hands in battle against climate
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change
.

In conclusion
, I
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with the opinion that rich
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should be more
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responsible
to struggle against the
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environmental
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as they can afford it while the
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poor
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countries
should deal with their internal problems.
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IELTS essay Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibilities to climate change than developing countries. others believe countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. 1

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328 words
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