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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. with this opinion? v. 2
Alternative sources of energy is increasingly gaining popularity this days. It is extremely essential for government to boost this essential needs for her citizen. This essay will argue why promotion of power supply should be urgently provided by the government rather than an individual or a cooperate body alone. To begin with, other sources of energy should be promoted by the government to increase the existing power. This in return will promote economic and infrastructural growth of the state, in addition, the citizens will also enjoy living and do their businesses with ease. A very good example is, having un interrupted light to produce a product by an enterpreneur will significantly increase a constant tax payment back to the government which can further be used to develop the state infrastructure. Likewise, health institutions will progressively and effectively function to fulfill their mandate. It is ultimately essential for government to promote this sector in order to ease the life of its citizen and develop the state. In contrast, enhancing alternative source of energy by an individual or a cooperate body will adversely affect the economy negatively. Products and services will absolutely increase in price and low quality products might dominate the market. An electronic product, for instance, that supposed to be sold for $100, may increase to $150. Additionally, food products will increase in price and low income earners will find it eventually difficult to live. As a consequence, promoting alternative source of energy by an individual or a cooperate body will adversely affect the masses and the economy. To sum up, this essay argued why other sources of energy should be enhanced by the government. As far as I am concerned, promoting other sources of energy by an individual will result to an economic hardship, hence, government should take it as a responsibility to promote this.
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sources
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energy
is
increasingly
gaining popularity
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this days
. It is
extremely
essential for
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government
to boost this essential needs for her citizen. This essay will argue why promotion of power supply should be
urgently
provided by the
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government
rather
than an
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individual
or
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a cooperate
body alone.

To
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begin
with, other
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sources
of
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energy
should
be promoted
by the
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government
to
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increase
the existing power. This in return will promote economic and infrastructural growth of the state,
in addition
, the citizens will
also
enjoy living and do their businesses with
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ease
. A
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very
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good
example is, having
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un
interrupted light to produce a
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product
by an
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enterpreneur
will
significantly
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increase
a constant tax payment back to the
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government
which can
further
be
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used
to develop the state infrastructure.
Likewise
, health institutions will
progressively
and
effectively
function to fulfill their mandate. It is
ultimately
essential for
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government
to promote this sector in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
the life of its citizen and develop the state.

In contrast
, enhancing alternative
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source
of
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energy
by an
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individual
or
After 'a', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'cooperate' is correct. If 'cooperate' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a cooperate
body will
adversely
affect the economy
negatively
.
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Products
and services will
absolutely
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increase
in price and low quality
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products
might dominate the market. An electronic
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product
,
for instance
, that supposed to
be sold
for $100, may
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increase
to $150.
Additionally
, food
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products
will
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increase
in price and low income earners will find it
eventually
difficult to
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live
. As a consequence, promoting alternative
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source
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
by an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
or
After 'a', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'cooperate' is correct. If 'cooperate' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a cooperate
body will
adversely
affect the masses and the economy.

To sum up, this essay argued why other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
should
be enhanced
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
. As far as I
am concerned
, promoting other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
by an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
will result to an economic hardship,
hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should take it as a responsibility to promote this.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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