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Maintaining public libraries are waste of money and resources since internet is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Nowadays, there are more and more websites and applications created for people to dealing with their problems and improve their knowledges, such as google, cambridge dictionary, youtube, ebooks and so on. Some people argue that since there are lots of technological resources, building a govermantal libraries is a waste of time, neverthless, there are also some opposite arguments. I personaly agree with the second views, In this essay I will dibate both opinions and give reasons for them. During this modern world, lots of teenager might think that it is no need to build a maintaining libary, it costs much money and space so that people should pay more to the government. People can easily gain new knowlege online and it is also more faster and convenient than finding a suitable book in the library. For example, my brother always study on EDX, it's an application including many top universities' cources. It contain varies subjects such as business, engeneering, computer science and so on. What's more? People can study anytime and anywhere without any fees. Inadition, student can earn a certificate from the university after the end of the class, this can really heps a person to develop his cofidence. On the other hand, some people belived that study in the libary has more advantages than online learning. These people said that doing the things in the libary is more efficent than at home, they can focus on their work and they will not be distrubed by the other things or other family members. On the other site, there's also some elders who don't like to use the smartphone or computer, they think they are very complex and don't want to learn, therefore, building a public library can helps these people learning well and provide a suitable study enviroment. Overall, although building a library costs a lot, I still think that the advantages outweight the disadvantages. It provides more choice for people who want to find a place to study and also give a way for people to receive knowledges.
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people
to dealing with their problems and
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improve
their
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knowledges
, such as google,
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cambridge dictionary
,
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youtube
,
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ebooks
and
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Some
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people
argue that since there are lots of technological resources, building a
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govermantal
libraries is a waste of time,
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neverthless
, there are
also
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opposite arguments. I
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personaly
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with the second views, In this essay I will
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dibate
both opinions and give reasons for them.

During this modern world, lots of
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might
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think
that it is no need to build a maintaining
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libary
, it costs much money and space
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so
that
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people
should pay more to the
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government
.
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can
easily
gain new
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knowlege
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online and
it is
also
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more faster
and convenient than finding a suitable book in the library.
For example
, my brother always
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study
on EDX, it's an application including
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many
top universities'
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cources
. It
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contain
varies subjects such as business,
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engeneering
, computer science and
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so
on. What's more?
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People
can
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study
anytime and anywhere without any fees.
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Inadition
, student can earn a certificate from the university after the
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end
of the
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class
, this can
really
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heps
a person to develop his
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cofidence
.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
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belived
that
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study
in the
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libary
has more advantages than online learning. These
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people
said that doing the things in the
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libary
is more
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efficent
than at home, they can focus on their
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work and
they will not be
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distrubed
by the
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other
things or
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other
family members. On the
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other
site, there's
also
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some
elders who don't like to
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use
the smartphone or computer, they
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think
they are
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very
complex and don't want to learn,
therefore
, building a public library can
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helps
these
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people
learning well and provide a suitable
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enviroment
.

Overall
, although building a library costs a lot, I
still
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think
that the advantages
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outweight
the disadvantages. It provides more choice for
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people
who want to find a place to
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study
and
also
give a way for
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people
to receive
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knowledges
.
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IELTS essay Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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