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Some people think that companies and individuals, rather than governments, should pay to clean up the pollution that they have caused. To what extend do you agree with this statement. v.2

Some people think that companies and individuals, rather than governments, should pay to clean up the pollution that they have caused. v. 2
Pollution has became the most problematic issue that draws attention from worldwide. Who should bear the responsibility for resolving the stinking sewage and the ubiquitous plastic bags still under discussion. Personally, individual and commercial organization, surly, are encouraged to provide financial support, yet funds and scrutiny from government are also expected. Money collected from citizens and industry could significantly help mitigation the current situation. By forcing every citizens dwellers instill sewage cleaning equipment and pay for it, on the one hand, guaranteeing a stable source of funds for water treatment, on the other hand, elevating the overall awareness of environment protection, as the bill for water-cleaning serves a great reminder whenever they turn on the tap. Besides, the disposal expenditure added on each product, be it a canned jam, or a box of milk, saved the bother for calculating the total recycling fee every household dues every year, while covers the expenses for recycle it. It is noteworthy that there are lots of pollution, however, far beyond the ability of a wealthy man or a high profitable organization, and require the authority introduce new policy and allocate money as well as labor to deal with. The oil exploiting industry is a good example to illustrate. Because of it, the greenhouse emission is soaring to a new level that never happened before, the tax added on it is just a fraction compare with the possible fee to counterfeit the negative effect it brings to human being. The only method to alleviate the current situation is enacting policy in favour of curtailing the usage of fossil oil and encouraging popularizing of the sustainable and clean alternatives at the same time. In general, in an attempt to fight contamination, the consensus effort from both leadership level and execution level are needed, merely through the effort of one part often gains limited success.
Pollution has
became
the most problematic issue that draws attention from worldwide. Who should bear the responsibility for resolving the stinking sewage and the ubiquitous plastic bags
still
under discussion.
Personally
, individual and commercial organization, surly,
are encouraged
to provide financial support,
yet
funds and scrutiny from
government
are
also
expected
.

Money collected from citizens and industry could
significantly
help
mitigation the
current
situation. By forcing every citizens dwellers instill sewage cleaning equipment and pay for it, on the one hand, guaranteeing a stable source of funds for water treatment,
on the other hand
, elevating the
overall
awareness of environment protection, as the bill for water-cleaning serves a great reminder whenever they turn on the tap.
Besides
, the disposal expenditure
added
on each product, be it a canned jam, or a box of milk, saved the bother for calculating the total recycling fee every household dues every year, while covers the expenses for recycle it.

It is noteworthy that there are lots of pollution,
however
, far beyond the ability of a wealthy
man
or a high profitable organization, and require the authority introduce new policy and allocate money
as well
as labor to deal with. The oil exploiting industry is a
good
example to illustrate.
Because
of it, the greenhouse emission is soaring to a new level that never happened
before
, the tax
added
on it is
just
a fraction compare with the possible fee to counterfeit the
negative
effect it brings to human being. The
only
method to alleviate the
current
situation is enacting policy in
favour
of curtailing the usage of fossil oil and encouraging popularizing of the sustainable and clean alternatives at the same time.

In general
, in an attempt to fight contamination, the consensus effort from both leadership level and execution level
are needed
,
merely
through the effort of one part
often
gains limited success.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that companies and individuals, rather than governments, should pay to clean up the pollution that they have caused. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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