Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Essay topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

Essay topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Health is a very important part of our live. In order to live longer, we have to have a good health that comes from our food. Some people I am sure would agree that eating in resturants is more exciting while others disagree. In my view, I would prefer to prepare and eat at home for two imperative reasons. To begin with, preparing food at home saves mony and time. When you want to cook something at home, you will buy vegetables and what you need from stores at lower prices. However, if you would go to eat in a restaurant, you have to pay money. Take my sister as an example, most of the time, she goes to eat outside with her friends to enjoy and she doesn' t like to cook. Actually, she spend a lot of money that sometimes she didn' t afford her budget. Few months ago, she bored from me money because she had used all her salary to pay her expenses especially, she eats at restaurant. This experience taught me that we should prepare our food in the kitchen and we can save some money to the future. Hence, in addition to saving currency, preparing food at home is healthier than in restaurant or fast food shops. All people recognize that food in restaurant have many problems to our body. Not has it many calories that has a negative effect in the heart, but it also may dirty that lead to diseases. For instance, I read an article about the disadvantages of eating outside. The author asserts that food in restaurant has definitely many bad things to our organs such as heart diseases, high cholesterol, obesity and even stomach ulcer. In fact, he encourages people to prepare food at home to be healthier. As we clearly can see, we must pay attention to our food. By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur that cooking in our kitchen is more enjoyable and healthier. All people should take action about a wrong habit, especially, eating at a restaurant
Health is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
part of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
longer, we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
health that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
from our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
I am sure would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that eating in
Possible spelling mistake found.
resturants
is more exciting while others disagree. In my view, I would prefer to prepare and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
at home for two imperative reasons.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, preparing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
at home saves
Possible spelling mistake found.
mony
and time. When you want to cook something at home, you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
vegetables and what you need from stores at lower prices.
However
, if you would go to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
, you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
. Take my sister as an example, most of the time, she goes to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
outside with her friends to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
enjoy and
she
Possible spelling mistake found.
doesn&
#039; t like to cook. Actually, she
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "spends", "spent".
spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
she
Possible spelling mistake found.
didn&
#039; t afford her budget. Few months ago, she bored from me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
she had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
all her salary to pay her expenses
especially
, she
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eats
at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
. This experience taught me that we should prepare our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
in the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
kitchen and
we can save
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to the future.

Hence
,
in addition
to saving currency, preparing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
at home is healthier than in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
shops. All
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
recognize that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
problems to our body. Not has it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
calories that has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect in the heart,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it
also
may dirty that lead to diseases.
For instance
, I read an article about the disadvantages of eating outside. The author asserts that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
has definitely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
things to our organs such as heart diseases, high cholesterol, obesity and even stomach ulcer. In fact, he encourages
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to prepare
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
at home to be healthier. As we
clearly
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
pay attention to our food.

By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur that cooking in our kitchen is more enjoyable and healthier. All
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should take action about a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
habit,
especially
, eating at a
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
restaurant
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts