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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. v. 1
It is irrefutable that climatic change is one of the major concerns across the globe today. While one section of the society consider this as an opportunity for creating and expanding businesses, others see this as a drawback for them. This essay will juxtapose both these views, and finally conclude with my opinion. With the dramatic change in the weather patterns, the tourism industry has been harshly hit. Owing to unexpected rise and fall in temperatures in most of the parts of the world, such as extreme weather conditions in India, where summers are as warm as 50 degrees Celsius and in winters mercury level drops to nearly freezing 0 degrees Celsius, tourists do not prefer to visit such places. Consequently, local businesses and overall economy dependent on tourism gets detrimentally affected. On the contrary, few businesses such as air conditioner manufactures, fans and heaters manufacturing companies see this as a good time to boost their business as the demand of their products shoot up due to climatic change and consequently they have to increase the supply as well. Their agenda becomes very clear and their business potentially increases in such conditions. In conclusion, though few businesses gain from the climate change, I believe the majority has a perilous effect on them. Climate change is a very dangerous issue which will negatively affect each one of us, even those who are gaining profit from it today. Hence, we all should have a provident approach towards it and be solicitous about our future.
It is irrefutable that climatic
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change
is one of the major concerns across the globe
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today
. While one section of the society consider this as an opportunity for creating and expanding
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businesses
, others
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see
this as a drawback for them. This essay will juxtapose both these views, and
finally
conclude with my opinion.

With the dramatic
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change
in the weather patterns, the tourism industry has been
harshly
hit. Owing to unexpected rise and fall in temperatures in most of the parts of the world, such as extreme weather conditions in India, where summers are as warm as 50 degrees Celsius and in winters mercury level drops to
nearly
freezing 0 degrees Celsius, tourists do not prefer to visit such places.
Consequently
, local
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businesses
and
overall
economy dependent on tourism
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gets
detrimentally
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affected
.

On the contrary
, few
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businesses
such as air conditioner manufactures, fans and heaters manufacturing
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companies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
this as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
time to boost their
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business
as the demand of their products shoot up due to climatic
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change
and
consequently
they
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have to
increase the supply
as well
. Their agenda becomes
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very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
and their
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business
potentially
increases in such conditions.

In conclusion
, though few
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businesses
gain from the climate
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change
, I believe the majority has a perilous effect on them. Climate
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change
is a
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very
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dangerous
issue which will
negatively
affect each one of us, even those who are gaining profit from it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
.
Hence
, we all should have a provident approach towards it and be solicitous about our future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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