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20. Disruptive school students have negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separate. Do you agree and disagree with this statement. v.1

20. Disruptive school students have negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separate. v. 1
Each student is a unique individual in the university. Some students are born with special gifts; others may be less lucky and tend to be naughty at school. Therefore, some people advocate that naughty students should be taught in different classes. I agree with their suggestion. This essay will present my reasons for this view. To begin with, separating naughty students in different classes will enhance better education outcome for all students. Hyperactive and insubordinate students will draw teachers' attention in classes and distract other students' concentration as well. If teachers spent too much time in correcting their disobedience,   the quality and quantity of teaching will be diminished.  This is unfair to good students who are eager to learn. Moreover, naughty students may become negative role models to ordinary students. In addition, teaching naughty students in different classes by more experienced teachers will help them to adapt themselves for their studies. Furthermore, it is easy for teachers to approach them by using special teaching strategies rather than traditional ones. For example, teachers will be able to pay more attention to behaviour politely.  Teaching naughty students separately doesn't convey a message that they are ignored rather than that they are in good care of their teachers. In conclusion, to teaching naughty students is a challenge for many teachers. Therefore, teaching them in different classes and teaching them with different methods will result in better education outcome. This will help them to prepare for their future academic study and careers.
Each
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student
is a unique individual in the university.
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Some
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students
are born
with special gifts; others may be less lucky and tend to be
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naughty
at school.
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,
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some
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people
advocate that
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naughty
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students
should
be taught
in
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different
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classes
. I
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agree
with their suggestion. This essay will present my reasons for this view.

To
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begin
with, separating
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naughty
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students
in
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different
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classes
will enhance better education outcome for all
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students
. Hyperactive and insubordinate
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students
will draw teachers' attention in
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classes
and distract other students' concentration
as well
. If
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teachers
spent too much time in correcting their disobedience,
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the quality and quantity of
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teaching
will
be diminished
.  This is unfair to
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good
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students
who are eager to learn.
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,
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naughty
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students
may become 
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negative
role models to ordinary students.

In addition
,
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teaching
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naughty
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students
in
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different
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classes
by more experienced
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teachers
will
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help
them to adapt themselves for their studies.
Furthermore
, it is easy for
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teachers
to approach them by using special teaching strategies
rather
than traditional ones.
For example
,
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teachers
will be able to pay more attention to
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behaviour
politely
.
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 Teaching
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naughty
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students
separately
doesn't convey a message that they are
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ignored
rather
than that they are in
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good
care of their teachers.

In conclusion
, to teaching naughty
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students
is a challenge for
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many
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teachers
.
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,
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teaching
them in
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different
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classes
and
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teaching
them with
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different
methods will result in better education outcome. This will
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help
them to prepare for their future academic study and careers.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay 20. Disruptive school students have negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separate. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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