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Some people think that children should start primary school later in life, others think that they should start it before 7. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that children should start primary school later in life, others think that they should start it before 7. v. 1
Nowadays, globalization means integrating the world in different dimensions like political, economic, social, and cultural. The boom of each country is essential to a relationship with the rest of the world. For communication, acquaintance with other cultures, knowing the cultural background, religious beliefs of the various nations, or how to relate to these cultures and then identifying their own culture is important. I believe that the increased international trading and the cultural coalition have profits such as economic and knowledge growth and above all creating world peace while others think that these activities have destructive effects on a nation's identity because it is harmful to the local culture. Increasing relations and international business refine the economy, foreign investment and also improving Global Position in developing countries such as China, India, and Brazil. Iran has oil and non-oil exports to neighbours, Asia, and even Europe, instead of them import industrial machines, medical equipment, and spare parts from them. Therefore, foreign exchanges will solve problems like shortage of manpower, weak production, the inability to adapt and launch new technologies. On the contrary, some people are concerned about the loss of national identity by the instrumental use of the people of the region as labourers by the owners of capital, the spread of some subcultures, or the residence of investor families in the area. Thus these problems have an influence on the behaviours and language of the people of the region, like what happened in many years in some countries as India and Morocco that were colonies of England and Spain. To sum up, business relations and cultural contact not only improving economy and community relations, but also help compromise between nations and reduce racial disparities.
Nowadays, globalization means integrating the world in
different
dimensions like political, economic, social, and
cultural
. The boom of each country is essential to a relationship with the rest of the world. For communication, acquaintance with other cultures, knowing the
cultural
background, religious beliefs of the various nations, or how to relate to these cultures and then identifying their
own
culture is
important
.

I believe that the increased international trading and the
cultural
coalition have profits such as economic and knowledge growth and
above all
creating world peace while others
think
that these activities have destructive effects on a nation's identity
because
it is harmful to the local culture.

Increasing relations and international business refine the economy, foreign investment and
also
improving Global Position in
developing countries
such as China, India, and Brazil. Iran has oil and non-oil exports to
neighbours
, Asia, and even Europe,
instead
of them import industrial machines, medical equipment, and spare parts from them.
Therefore
, foreign exchanges will solve problems like shortage of manpower, weak production, the inability to adapt and launch new technologies.

On the contrary
,
some
people
are concerned
about the loss of national identity by the instrumental
use
of the
people
of the region as
labourers
by the owners of capital, the spread of
some
subcultures, or the residence of investor families in the area.
Thus
these problems have an influence on the
behaviours
and language of the
people
of the region, like what happened in
many
years in
some
countries as India and Morocco that were colonies of England and Spain.

To sum up, business relations and
cultural
contact not
only
improving economy and community relations,
but
also
help
compromise between nations and
reduce
racial disparities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that children should start primary school later in life, others think that they should start it before 7. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
7
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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