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Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. v.3

Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. v. 3
There is a dramatic increase in private transportation around the globe over the last few years. Increased wages, economic prosperity and depletion in vehicle prices made easy for people to have their own personal car. However, this has led to various detrimental issues including congestion, pollution and safety. For those reasons, I believe that limiting the number of cars in bigger cities could mitigate those problems. Completely banning cars in big cities is not a plausible solution as it is unrealistic, however, restricting the number of such private cars would be an effective solution indeed. Nowadays, traffic contributed a lot in widespread of pollution. Car smoke, traffic jams and loud horns of vehicles are few reasons that significantly affect the environment and people in many ways. People are more vulnerable to various diseases and many have serious health issues due to pollution. In order to tackle this issues, restriction on private car ownership should be imposed. Not allowing people to drive their cars in big cities is not possible while it is much reasonable to restrict the number of cars a family can own, the number of minimum passenger on each car while driving would be the two pragmatic solutions. Additionally, in order to combat with traffic congestion, new road infrastructure have been introduced by various nations that include deforestation to acquire more space to build new roads, modern bridges and pedestrian pathways. Those development works could destroy the natural habitat of various species that could lead towards the extinction of them from various countries. Nevertheless, prudent decisions should be taken to enhance the number of roads without doing any harm to the natural environment. On the other hand, personal vehicles are more convenient and safer than other means of transportation. This is not surprising that people often feel more comfortable and relaxed while driving their cars. Completely banning the use of private cars in cities would deprive people to travel freely and according to their own preference. To sum up, controlling and restricting vehicles in large cities would definitely play a pivotal role in improving people’s health and would also help in controlling factors that are the cause of deteriorating situation of the environment. But banning the private cars completely in big cities is not a pragmatic solution in my opinion.
There is a dramatic increase in
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private
transportation around the globe over the last few years. Increased wages, economic prosperity and depletion in
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vehicle
prices made easy for
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people
to have their
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own
personal
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car
.
However
, this has led to
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various
detrimental issues including congestion, pollution and safety. For those reasons, I believe that limiting the
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number
of
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cars
in bigger
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cities
could mitigate those problems. Completely banning
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cars
in
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big
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cities
is not a plausible solution as it is unrealistic,
however
, restricting the
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number
of such
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private
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cars
would be an effective solution
indeed
.

Nowadays, traffic contributed a lot in widespread of pollution.
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Car
smoke, traffic jams and loud horns of
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vehicles
are few reasons that
significantly
affect the environment and
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people
in
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many
ways.
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People
are more vulnerable to
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various
diseases and
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many
have serious health issues due to pollution. In order to tackle this issues, restriction on
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private
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car
ownership should
be imposed
. Not allowing
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people
to drive their
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cars
in
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big
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cities
is not possible while it is much reasonable to restrict the
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number
of
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cars
a family can
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own
, the
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number
of minimum passenger on each
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car
while driving would be the two pragmatic solutions.

Additionally
, in order to combat with traffic congestion, new road infrastructure have
been introduced
by
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various
nations that include deforestation to acquire more space to build new roads, modern bridges and pedestrian pathways. Those development works could
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destroy
the natural habitat of
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various
species that could lead towards the extinction of them from
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various
countries.
Nevertheless
, prudent decisions should
be taken
to enhance the
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number
of roads without doing any harm to the natural environment.

On the other hand
, personal
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vehicles
are more convenient and safer than other means of transportation. This is not surprising that
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people
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often
feel more comfortable and relaxed while driving their
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cars
. Completely banning the
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use
of
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private
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cars
in
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cities
would deprive
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people
to travel
freely
and according to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
preference.

To sum up, controlling and restricting
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vehicles
in large
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cities
would definitely play a pivotal role in improving
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people’s
health and would
also
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help
in controlling factors that are the cause of deteriorating situation of the environment.
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But
banning the
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private
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cars
completely in
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big
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cities
is not a pragmatic solution in my opinion.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
382 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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