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Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.1

Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. with this opinion. v. 1
Some people believe that driving vehicles are necessary to be banned in big cities, and I personally, agree with this point of view. This essay will talk about the reasons that people do not need to have their own cars in large cities. To begin with, the main reason is that people can conserve environments. It is well-known that the majority of environmental pollutions have caused by greenhouse gas emissions which result from driving cars. In fact, as the recent research from NewYork Times reported, carbon dioxide emissions have increased over 50 percent since car sales rose in the city. Therefore, if vehicles are prevented to drive on city roads, it would help to reduce the pollution. On the top of that, another reason is that people do not need to commute by driving private cars anymore. This is because most drive owners use their cars for commuting. However, recent public transports have been organized so well that commuters may not require having own cars. People can take a public transportation for their short journey at anytime and anywhere with reasonable fares. From my experience, even though I am a drive owner, I usually take a bus for short distance due to its cheap price, and I pay only 1. 5 dollars for using buses regardless of the distance. In conclusion, it seems to me that there are clear reasons to ban the private vehicles in the large cities in terms of preservation of the environments and convenience of using public transportations. Therefore, I believe that people should ban driving own cars, in the long term.
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,
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do not need to have their
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cars
in large cities.

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with, the main
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reason
is that
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people
can conserve environments. It is well-known that the majority of environmental pollutions have caused by greenhouse gas emissions which result from
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driving
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cars
. In fact, as the recent research from
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NewYork
Times reported, carbon dioxide emissions have increased over 50 percent since
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car
sales rose in the city.
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, if vehicles are
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prevented
to drive on city roads, it would
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reduce
the pollution.

On the top of that, another
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is that
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people
do not need to commute by
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cars
anymore. This is
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most drive owners
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, recent public transports have
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well that commuters may not require having
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own
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cars
.
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People
can take a public transportation for their short journey at anytime and anywhere with reasonable fares. From my experience,
even though
I am a drive owner, I
usually
take a bus for short distance due to its
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cheap
price, and I pay
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only
1. 5 dollars for using buses regardless of the distance.

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, it seems to me that there are
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clear
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reasons
to ban the private vehicles in the large
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cities
in terms of preservation of the environments and convenience of using public transportations.
Therefore
, I believe that
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people
should ban
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driving
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own
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cars
, in the long term.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. with this opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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