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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in city, while others believe that bicycles are better. Discuss both views and gives your opinions. v.1

Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in city, while others believe that bicycles are better. v. 1
Some people prefer to use a machine for travelling, while others like for the bicycles. In my opinion, both modes of transport have their advantage and disadvantages. However, I prefer the bike for travelling short distances. The biggest merits of bicycles that they are an ecofriendly mode of transport. They do not release any green gases or air pollution. Bicycles are also a cheap mode of transport because they do not need any fuel. Another advantage of riding a bike is that you can gain healthiness because it helps the rider to prevent some disease. However, bike riding is physically demanding task and not suitable for long distance journey. Another disadvantage of bicycles is that bike doesn’t have any protection rain or shine. Cars, by contrast, are the ultimate in comfort. They allow people to travel in air-conditioned environment and provide adequate protection from any weather. Another advantage of travelling by station wagon is, carstation wagon can reach a high speed. In addition cars have some disadvantages such as, motor travelling is expensive because limousine needs fuel, convertible emits the greenhouse gasses which is polluted the air, travelling by station wagon is having a big risk for accident because motor moves with high speed, travelling by motor is needing a good preparation and concentrate because with a high speed of ride anything can be happened. In summary, both cars and bicycles have their pluses and minuses. Personally, I would like prefer a bike if the journey is short and supported by good weather. However, I prefer to take a wagon for long distance journey
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, while others like for the
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. In my opinion, both modes of transport have their advantage and disadvantages.
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prefer
the
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short distances.

The biggest merits of
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bicycles
that they are an
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ecofriendly
mode of transport. They do not release any green gases or air pollution.
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cheap
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because
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bike
is that you can gain healthiness
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helps
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prevent
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disease.
However
,
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bike
riding is
physically
demanding task and not suitable for long distance journey. Another disadvantage of
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bicycles
is that
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bike
doesn’t have any protection rain or shine.

Cars, by contrast, are the ultimate in comfort. They
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allow
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people
to travel in air-conditioned environment and provide adequate protection from any weather. Another advantage of
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travelling
by station
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wagon
is,
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wagon
can reach a high speed. In
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addition
cars have
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disadvantages such as, motor
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is expensive
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limousine needs fuel, convertible emits the greenhouse gasses which
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the air,
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travelling
by station
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wagon
is having a
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big
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risk
for accident
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motor
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moves
with high speed,
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travelling
by motor
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good
preparation and concentrate
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because
with a high speed of ride anything can
be happened
.

In summary, both cars and
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bicycles
have their pluses and minuses.
Personally
, I would like
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prefer
a
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bike
if the journey is short and supported by
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good
weather.
However
, I
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prefer
to take a
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wagon
for long distance journey
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IELTS essay Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in city, while others believe that bicycles are better. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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