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Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that videos, films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that videos, films and computers should be used instead. v. 1
With the advancement of technology, certain nations think that books should be replaced by digital devices in school and all lessons will be taught by that device. In my opinion, that digital tools should be combined with school programs, but not replaced dramatically. Moreover, school teachers can make a plan and enrol them as day of watching TV and ect. It is clearly evident, that children are smarter than elder man, a distinction between elder generation and the young generation is fast learn, hence teaching method by TV, computer can give a bit advantage. Some lessons require video such as history where too much detail. Many historical facts can be captured by documentary film and can be presented to school children for easy perceive. Moreover, certain countries have found video lessons are more beneficial and have included in the school program. There have enrolled digital tools as device which support for explanation whole theme throughout the semester. However, TV, computer will never replace a book. Because with book everyone can build own view regarding book impression, while in a video shows film maker imagination which does not always match. During the reading a book people can generate impressive from book without external influence and keep them in mind. Book can form us as individual, we can take into account that advice what we prefer. In conclusion, the old school teaching program should develop with digital tools together. Furthermore, a combination of two sectors can be reached a good result in the education sector.
With the advancement of technology, certain nations
think
that
books
should
be replaced
by digital devices in
school
and all lessons will
be taught
by that device. In my opinion, that digital tools should
be combined
with
school
programs,
but
not replaced
dramatically
.
Moreover
,
school
teachers can
make
a plan and enrol them as day of watching TV and
ect
.

It is
clearly
evident, that children are smarter than elder
man
, a distinction between elder generation and the young generation is
fast
learn,
hence
teaching method by TV, computer can give a
bit
advantage.
Some
lessons require video such as history where too much detail.
Many
historical facts can
be captured
by documentary film and can
be presented
to
school
children for easy perceive.
Moreover
, certain countries have found video lessons are more beneficial and have included in the
school
program. There have enrolled digital tools as device which support for explanation whole theme throughout the semester.

However
, TV, computer will never replace a
book
.
Because
with
book
everyone can build
own
view regarding
book
impression, while in a video
shows
film maker imagination which does not always match. During the reading a
book
people
can generate impressive from
book
without external influence and
keep
them in mind.
Book
can form us as individual, we can take into account that advice what we prefer.

In conclusion
, the
old
school
teaching program should develop with digital tools together.
Furthermore
, a combination of two sectors can
be reached
a
good
result in the education sector.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that videos, films and computers should be used instead. v. 1

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  American English
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253 words
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