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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both side and give your opinion. v.10

Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. v. 10
Art is a very important part of humanity’s history, and it can be found anywhere from the walls of caves in the halls of museums. While some believe that learning art in school is not important, I side with those who feel that art is an important subject. On the one hand, it could be argued that studying art in schools is a loose of a student's precious time. Those who support the idea of art as a non-essential subject argue that schools only provide basic art training and to enhance a student’s artistic skill parents need to enrol them in specialized training institutes. Students will learn better stills in specialized institutes rather than in schools. In short, they feel that the school should focus on imparting knowledge on essential subjects like Science, Math and Information technology. They also argue that studying art in school will not enhance the scope of employability in the future. On the other hand, I side with those who believe that learning art in institutes is not a waste of time. It is a fact that through art pupils is able to express their ideas and view more openly rather than in words. For instance, introvert students can convert their thoughts through nonverbal communication and art can be one of the means. However, my strongest argument for supporting arts in school is that children learn about their culture and history. It is easy for children to interpret the idea or thought from pictures and sculptures rather than by just reading books. In conclusion, although the school provides only basic training in arts, leaning arts does provide children with a better understanding of their history. Therefore, on balance, I strongly believe art should be considered as an important subject of the school's curriculum.
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part of humanity’s history, and it can
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believe that learning
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, I side with those who feel that
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is an
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subject.

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be argued
that studying
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in
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is a loose of a student's precious time. Those who support the
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as a non-essential subject argue that
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schools
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only
provide basic
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training and to enhance a student’s artistic
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parents need to enrol them in specialized training institutes. Students will learn better stills in specialized institutes
rather
than in
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schools
. In short, they feel that the
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school
should focus on imparting knowledge on essential subjects like Science, Math and Information technology. They
also
argue that studying
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art
in
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school
will not enhance the scope of employability in the future.

On the other hand
, I side with those who believe that learning
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art
in institutes is not a waste of time. It is a fact that through
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art
pupils is able to express their
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ideas
and view more
openly
rather
than in words.
For instance
, introvert students can convert their thoughts through nonverbal communication and
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art
can be one of the means.
However
, my strongest argument for supporting
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arts
in
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school
is that children learn about their culture and history. It is easy for children to interpret the
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idea
or
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thought
from pictures and sculptures
rather
than by
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just
reading books.

In conclusion
, although the
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school
provides
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only
basic training in
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arts
, leaning
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arts
does provide children with a better understanding of their history.
Therefore
, on balance, I
strongly
believe
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art
should
be considered
as an
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important
subject of the school's curriculum.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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