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Some people think that art is an essential subject at school, while some think that it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that art is an essential subject at school, while some think that it is a waste of time. v. 1
The importance of teaching art at school is debatable. There are some people that assign art a place in the school curriculum, while others do not. In this essay, I will discuss the merits and demerits of art as an essential subject in schools, and tell you why I think that art should be taught in schools. Art provides a medium for students to express their thoughts creatively and helps them break down complex ideas into smaller pieces that are easily digestible. For example, a pictorial depiction of how electrons interact in an atom can go a long way in cementing this concept in a young mind. Schools that provide a flexible environment that support each child's individual learning process will see an improvement in test scores and overall interest. This is one of the merits of incorporating art in schools. On the other hand, art can be a tool that distracts students from core subject matter that requires understanding a concept in depth. It can be argued that time allocated to art can be used more efficiently in teaching young students real world ideas that will help them progress in their fields of choice. Institutes with an academic oriented teaching plan have shown better results in competitive exams that play a crucial role in a student's future. The above argument can give you pause while considering inculcating art in schools. In my personal opinion, I believe that art plays a key role in ensuring a student's all round development, engaging all their senses. All forms of art, such as music and dance, teach students life lessons like team work, co-ordination and focus. This is why I support the notion of including art in schools. In conclusion, compelling arguments can be made for both sides of this issue, and hence, it becomes imperative to vet each school and its students thoroughly before implementing such measures. I believe it is not a mere coincidence that the great geniuses of the past were also artists, and this must be incorporated in schools.
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to express their thoughts
creatively
and
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helps
them break down complex
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ideas
into smaller pieces that are
easily
digestible.
For example
, a pictorial depiction of how electrons interact in an atom can go a long way in cementing this concept in a young mind.
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that provide a flexible environment that support each child's individual learning process will
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an improvement in
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scores and
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interest. This is one of the merits of incorporating
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in schools.

On the other hand
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can be a tool that distracts
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students
from core
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real world
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them progress in their fields of choice. Institutes with an academic oriented teaching plan have shown better results in competitive exams that play a crucial role in a student's future. The above argument can give you pause while considering inculcating
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art
in schools.

In my personal opinion, I believe that
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art
plays a key role in ensuring a student's all round development, engaging all their senses. All forms of
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art
, such as music and dance, teach
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students
life lessons like team work, co-ordination and focus. This is why I support the notion of including
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art
in schools.

In conclusion
, compelling arguments can
be made
for both sides of this issue, and
hence
, it becomes imperative to vet each
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school
and its
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students
thoroughly
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before
implementing such measures. I believe it is not a mere coincidence that the great geniuses of the past were
also
artists, and this
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must
be incorporated
in
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.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that art is an essential subject at school, while some think that it is a waste of time. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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