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Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. v. 2
Over a period of time, advertisement has become the most popular strategy for marketing and promoting the products or services. It has brought significant change in the pattern of expenditure and consumption in the society. Some people support the idea of advertising a product, whereas others think that it brings a negative impact on the society. I will discuss both the views in my essay. On one hand, advertising is an effective way of spreading the awareness among people about the use of new and existing products. Moreover, it enables the customers to compare a product with other competitive products available in the market, so that they decide whether a product is worth buying or not. Advertisements help in educating the society about various health and safety issues. Additionally, it is the best way to raise the demand for the products. On the other hand, it stimulates people for impulsive buying by providing different promotional offers. As a result, instead of saving spend their money on purchasing unnecessary goods. Sometimes, through advertising some companies provide exaggerated and unrealistic review of their products. Consequently, people are misguided and cheated by such marketing tricks. Moreover, it only highlights the positive characteristics of a product and tries to hide its negative aspects. In Summation, certainly, the production and innovation of goods and services have increased due to industrialisation. Nevertheless, as a result of advertisements, the gap between the producers and consumers has also narrowed. In my opinion, although advertisements have both negative and positive impact on the society, but the benefit of providing awareness outweighs any negatives.
Over a period of time,
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advertisement
has become the most popular strategy for marketing and promoting the
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products
or services. It has brought significant
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change
in the pattern of expenditure and consumption in the
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society
.
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Some
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people
support the
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idea
of advertising a
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product
, whereas others
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think
that it brings a
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negative
impact on the
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society
. I will discuss both the views in my essay.

On one hand, advertising is an effective way of spreading the awareness among
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people
about the
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use
of new and existing
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products
.
Moreover
, it enables the customers to compare a
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product
with other competitive
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products
available in the market,
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so
that they decide whether a
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product
is worth buying or not.
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Advertisements
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help
in educating the
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society
about various health and safety issues.
Additionally
, it is the best way to raise the demand for the products.

On the other hand
, it stimulates
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people
for impulsive buying by providing
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different
promotional offers.
As a result
,
instead
of saving spend their money on purchasing unnecessary
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goods
.
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Sometimes
, through advertising
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some
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companies
provide exaggerated and unrealistic review of their
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products
.
Consequently
,
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people
are misguided
and cheated by such marketing tricks.
Moreover
, it
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only
highlights the
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positive
characteristics of a
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product
and tries to
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hide
its
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negative
aspects.

In Summation,
certainly
, the production and innovation of
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goods
and services have increased due to
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industrialisation
.
Nevertheless
,
as a result
of
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advertisements
, the gap between the producers and consumers has
also
narrowed. In my opinion, although
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advertisements
have both
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negative
and
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positive
impact on the
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society
,
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but
the benefit of providing awareness outweighs any negatives.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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