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it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v.1

it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 1
We are living in a high competitive world developing in leaps and bounds. It seems like everything is appearing and moving in a hurry to follow the pace of modern society. Some people think that you' d better to catch up with others before the gap is too big to close, while others still insist work to details and not so fast. Personally speaking, I disagree with the statement that it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. In this essay, I will elaborate my reasons. First of all, working slowly and carefully can guarantee results of higher quality. Although we are facing a fast chancing world in this era, people still appreciate flawless great products made by slow but scrupulous hands more than those have lots of notable shortcomings. For example, the recently most popular technology company, Apple, was rarely the first company to enter several burgeoning fields. But for most of the time Apple dominated the markets with their new products made with great care and never let their customers suffer the mistakes of their own engineers like other companies did in order to get into the market first. That' s how the Apple won the reputation for making reliable devices and eventually gained great success. Secondly, some mistakes should not be risked so it' s better to slow down and refine the works. Imagine if the car you are driving today was made by a manufacturer who did not pay too much care just because it was in a hurry to sell. I assume that will upset you greatly whenever you are driving the car because in term of safety a single mistake of the company can cost our lives. What' s more, in some projects even if we tried our best to prevent mistakes but some accidents happened any way. Just think about how many times human has failed the rocket launching and how many lives were lost in those explosions of the rockets in the sky. So there are still huge risks even if we use the best minds and greatest care, what' s the reason to fast the pace and risk even more? In a nutshell, because working slowly with care is likely to have better work results and some risks are so huge that they are unacceptable, people should not work too fast.
We are living in a high competitive world developing in leaps and bounds. It seems like everything
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is appearing
and moving in a hurry to follow the pace of modern society.
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to close, while others
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.
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speaking, I disagree with the statement that it is more
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quickly
and
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mistakes
than to
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slowly
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sure that everything is correct. In this essay, I will elaborate my reasons.

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First of all
, working
slowly
and
carefully
can guarantee results of higher quality. Although we are facing a
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fast
chancing world in this era,
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people
still
appreciate flawless great products made by slow
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but
scrupulous hands more than those have lots of notable shortcomings.
For example
, the recently most popular technology
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company
, Apple, was rarely the
first
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company
to enter several burgeoning fields.
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But
for most of the time Apple dominated the markets with their new products made with great
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care
and never
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let
their customers suffer the
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mistakes
of their
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own
engineers like other
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companies
did in order to
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get
into the market
first
.
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That&
#039; s how the Apple won the reputation for making reliable devices and
eventually
gained great success.

Secondly
,
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mistakes
should not
be risked
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it&
#039; s better to slow down and refine the works. Imagine if the car you are driving
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was made
by a manufacturer who did not pay too much
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care
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just
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because
it was in a hurry to sell. I assume that will upset you
greatly
whenever you are driving the car
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because
in term of safety a single
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mistake
of the
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company
can cost our
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lives
.
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What&
#039; s more, in
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some
projects even if we tried our best to
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mistakes
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accidents happened any way.
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about how
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times human has failed the rocket launching and how
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lives
were lost
in those explosions of the rockets in the sky.
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So
there are
still
huge
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risks
even if we
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use
the best minds and greatest
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care
,
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what&
#039; s the reason to
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the pace and
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even more?

In a nutshell,
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working
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with
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care
is likely to have better
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results and
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are
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so
huge that they are unacceptable,
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people
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work
too
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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