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Crime is a big problem in the world many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it To what extent do you agree or disagree Give your own opinion v.2

Crime is a big problem in the world many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it Give your own opinion v. 2
Undoubtedly, numerous tv shows and computer games have provided a comfortable platform for child' s recreational activities. However, some nude tv shows and violence-related games have adverse ramifications on children to make them more aggressive and unsocial. this essay would discuss the detrimental impact of such activities, along with effective solutions. First and foremost, violent tv programmes and video games can trigger children to adopt bad behaviour and make them more aggressive. this is because these games and shows are mostly related to crime, war, murder and so on. . Also, as children do not have the capacity to distinguish between right and wrong, they perceive these demonic activities as good vibes without any hesitation. For instance, it was found by child association in the UK that children who often play violence-related games and watch tv shows of conflicting scenes are more likely to bully others, as well as, show more aggression to their parents. As a result, such games and activities can turn a child into a criminal in their later life, which is even an awful fortune for a country' s development. However, the problem is not insurmountable and several measures can be adopted to curb this issue. Firstly, the government should play an effective role to ban such kinds of games and programmes, that impart inappropriate lessons to the children. For example, in 2018, porn videos and conflicting games like pubg, were banned in Nepal by Nepalese authorities. Secondly, guardians must pay attention to their children' s activities and make sure that their kids do not watch unethical tv shows or play violent games. Instead of letting children waste time on such activities, fruitful action that is not only recreational but also educative should be planned by parents to pass their children' s time. In this way, neither the children would get the opportunity to learn about violence, nor adopt them through games and tv shows. In conclusion, undeniably, today' s kids are tomorrow' s citizens. Therefore, it is a prime responsibility of parents and government to keep conflict-related games, programmes, and activities, from children, at bay.
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and
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games
have provided a comfortable platform for
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child&
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activities
.
However
,
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nude
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and
violence-related
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games
have adverse ramifications on
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children
to
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make
them more aggressive and unsocial.
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this
essay would discuss the detrimental impact of such
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activities
, along with effective solutions.

First
and foremost, violent
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programmes
and video
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can trigger
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to adopt
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bad
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behaviour
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this
is
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because
these
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games
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and


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are
mostly
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so
on.
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Also
, as
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children
do not have the capacity to distinguish between right and
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wrong
, they perceive these demonic
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activities
as
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good
vibes without any hesitation.
For instance
, it
was found
by child association in the UK that
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children
who
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often
play violence-related
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games
and
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watch
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tv


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shows


of conflicting scenes are more likely to bully others,
as well
as,

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more
aggression to their parents.
As a result
, such
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games
and
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activities
can turn a child into a criminal in their later life, which is even an awful fortune for a
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country&
#039; s development.

However
, the problem is not insurmountable and several measures can
be adopted
to curb this issue.
Firstly
, the
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government
should play an effective role to ban such kinds of
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games
and
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programmes
, that impart inappropriate lessons to the
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children
.
For example
, in 2018, porn videos and conflicting
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games
like
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pubg
,
were banned
in Nepal by Nepalese authorities.
Secondly
, guardians
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must
pay attention to their
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children&
#039; s
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activities
and
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make
sure that their kids do not
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watch
unethical
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tv


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or
play violent
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games
.
Instead
of letting
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children
waste time on such
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activities
, fruitful action
that is
not
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only
recreational
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also
educative should
be planned
by parents to pass their
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children&
#039; s time. In this way, neither the
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children
would
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get
the opportunity to learn about violence, nor adopt them through
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games
and
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tv


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shows
.

In conclusion
,
undeniably
,
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today&
#039; s kids are
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tomorrow&
#039; s citizens.
Therefore
, it is a prime responsibility of parents and
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government
to
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keep
conflict-related
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games
,
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programmes
, and
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activities
, from
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children
, at bay.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27Mistakes

IELTS essay Crime is a big problem in the world many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it Give your own opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
17 paragraphs
350 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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