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Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. v. 2
For the time being, a commercial has been growing and broadening influence, due to have been changing technologies and increasing sell which have a positive impact on the income of companies. However, society throughout the years has been noticing degradation among consumers, because they are more time choosing things imposed by advertising and almost lost their own opinion. Overall, I think we could avoid negative effects and get more positive for everybody if use advertisement carefully. Thus, in the beginning the advertisement was developed with the good aims inasmuch as advertising clip should give consumers wide options to choice. Besides, via such video companies could make highly competitive conditions among one-type products. Now an advertisement around us permanently because gets access to more gadgets such as the internet, a billboard, the TV and so on. Therefore, new products and companies get more chances to represent them for better selling. However, throughout years clip makers have been finding out methods manipulate of an audience by repeatedly represents, repeat words, or, even, implement some technology that impairs on the psychology of consumers. For example, early in the century had shown much news about a twenty-fifth frame that imposed people to buy this product then throughout plenty of years different sources to try denied this information. Moreover, many advertisements show standards of beauty via new creams or other products that make women more beautiful or help lose weight that leads to doubt about their appearance. Besides, many companies via advertising have been selling not quality products because of a good clip outweigh high quality in our time. Thus, a good start turns into something ambiguous. To sum up, I believe advertising as well as other methods of product promotions. However, necessary to restrict using such videos and turn them into a style that is more comparative than attractive and intrusive.
For the time being, a commercial has been growing and broadening influence, due to have been changing technologies and increasing sell which have a
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positive
impact on the income of
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companies
.
However
, society throughout the years has been noticing degradation among consumers,
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because
they are more time choosing things imposed by advertising and almost lost their
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own
opinion.
Overall
, I
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think
we could avoid
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negative
effects and
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get
more
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positive
for everybody if
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use
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advertisement
carefully
.

Thus
, in the beginning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
was developed
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
aims inasmuch as advertising clip should give consumers wide options to choice.
Besides
, via such video
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companies
could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
highly
competitive conditions among one-type
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
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Now
an
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advertisement
around us
permanently
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because
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gets
access to more gadgets such as the internet, a billboard, the TV and
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so
on.
Therefore
, new
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products
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more chances to represent them for better selling.

However
, throughout years clip makers have been finding out methods manipulate of an audience by
repeatedly
represents, repeat words, or, even, implement
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some
technology that impairs on the psychology of consumers.
For example
, early in the century had shown much news about a twenty-fifth frame that imposed
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
this
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product
then throughout
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plenty
of years
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different
sources to try denied this information.
Moreover
,
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many
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advertisements
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
standards of beauty via new creams or other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
that
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make
women more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
or
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help
lose weight that leads to doubt about their appearance.
Besides
,
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many
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companies
via advertising have been selling not quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
clip outweigh high quality in our time.
Thus
, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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start
turns into something ambiguous.

To sum up, I believe advertising
as well
as other methods of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
promotions.
However
, necessary to restrict using such videos and turn them into a style
that is
more comparative than attractive and intrusive.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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