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Some people think that a hundred years later the world will progress and life will be easier for the majority of people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that a hundred years later the world will progress and life will be easier for the majority of people, while others disagree. v. 2
Although the technological and scientific progressions are adding comfortability to the living standards of people, these are not always guaranteed. Many believe that the world' s development will be the reason of smooth life while a few disagree with this view. I will present both views in this essay and my support for the former opinion. The proponents of the latter view state that the ongoing advancement will not solve the problem of the upcoming century and living a peaceful life would be harder. For instance, the world' s population itself will be double and growing trends of global warming will intensify. As a result, the greater need to feed the enormous population, their healthcare, education, and accommodation needs will increase. Whereas, the average cultivation areas, natural resources and water resources are shrinking. Furthermore, more and more nations are equipping themselves with atomic arsenals which can threaten the existence of human race, in the case of unresolved conflicts. On the other hand, the progression in various fields of life improving the prospects of better living in a few decades. The looming feeding crises are being resolved through multiple harvests in a given time period and developed nations are preparing to cope with the rapidly increasing demands of food. Consequently, the technological advance nation Israel is preparing to feed the world from their innovative cultivation methods. There is a widespread campaign run by various NGO' s about global warming and promoting the responsible living by planting more trees. In addition to these many nations are signing non-nuclear proliferation agreements in order to promote peace. To sum up, I firmly believe that life would be much easier as the world progress. Just as our living standards are far better than our ancestors, our descendants will have an easy life comparatively.
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comfortability
to the
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living
standards of
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people
, these are not always guaranteed.
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believe that the
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#039; s development will be the reason of smooth
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life
while a few disagree with this view. I will present both views in this essay and my support for the former opinion.

The proponents of the latter view state that the ongoing advancement will not solve the problem of the upcoming century and
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living
a peaceful
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life
would be harder.
For instance
, the
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world&
#039; s population itself will be double and growing trends of global warming will intensify.
As a result
, the greater need to feed the enormous population, their healthcare, education, and accommodation needs will increase. Whereas, the average cultivation areas, natural resources and water resources are shrinking.
Furthermore
, more and more
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nations
are equipping themselves with atomic arsenals which can threaten the existence of human race, in the case of unresolved conflicts.

On the other hand
, the progression in various fields of
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life
improving the prospects of better
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living
in a few decades. The looming feeding crises are
being resolved
through multiple harvests in a
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given
time period and developed
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nations
are preparing to cope with the
rapidly
increasing demands of food.
Consequently
, the technological advance
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nation
Israel is preparing to feed the
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world
from their innovative cultivation methods. There is a widespread campaign run by various
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NGO&
#039; s about global warming and promoting the responsible
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living
by planting more trees.
In addition
to these
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many
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nations
are signing non-nuclear proliferation agreements in order to promote peace.

To sum up, I
firmly
believe that
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life
would be much easier as the
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world
progress.
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Just
as our
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living
standards are far better than our ancestors, our descendants will have an easy
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life
comparatively
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that a hundred years later the world will progress and life will be easier for the majority of people, while others disagree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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