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many people in society believe that having fixed punishments for all crimes is a more efficient way of dealing with criminals in the justice system. what are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishments. v.1

many people in society believe that having fixed punishments for all crimes is a more efficient way of dealing with criminals in the justice system. what are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishments. v. 1
It has been argued that setting a predefined set of punishments for all the criminal activities would help justice system to deal with criminals in a better way. However, this trend would have its own pros and cons. In this essay I will discuss the advantages such as fast judgements and disadvantage like increased crime rate. The major advantage of this judicial system will be prompt and quick announcements of punishments. As in most of the countries around the world, the judicial system is so slow like any criminal case is pending for many years. For an instance ‘Nirbhaya rape case’ of India was the most heinous crime noted there, it had been into trials from last seven years. Still the culprits are alive while the victim lost her life after struggling for ten days. Another major advantage of this fixed punishment system would be that there would be no biasing. Nowadays, it is very common to see that spectrum of punishment is completely different for a powerful person as compared to a general public. For an instance A very famous Bollywood star was found guilty for hunting deer and rash driving leading to death of four poor laborers. But his power in terms of money, popularity made him free of guilty and no punishment was announced against him. If the same crime was commited by a common man, he would be behind the bars long time ago. However, this trend of fixed punishments also has some negative aspects. The primary drawback of this system would be avoiding the circumstances. For example, if the crime has been committed under pressure, unintentionally or in a planned way, all these things not considered could encourage criminals as they knew that punishment will be same and fixed. In conclusion, having a fixed punishment for all sorts of crimes will definitely benefit the judicial system in a way of quick response and unbiased judgements. On the other hand, may provoke criminals and may increase the rate of crime.
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been argued
that setting a predefined set of
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punishments
for all the
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criminal
activities would
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help
justice
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system
to deal with
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criminals
in a better way.
However
, this trend would have its
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own
pros and cons. In this essay I will discuss the advantages such as
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fast
judgements and disadvantage like increased
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crime
rate.

The major advantage of this judicial
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system
will be prompt and quick announcements of
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punishments
. As in most of the countries around the world, the judicial
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system
is
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so
slow like any
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criminal
case is pending for
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many
years. For an instance ‘
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Nirbhaya
rape case’ of India was the most heinous
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crime
noted there, it had been into trials from last seven years.
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Still
the culprits are alive while the victim lost her life after struggling for ten days.

Another major advantage of this
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fixed
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punishment
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system
would be that there would be no biasing. Nowadays, it is
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very
common to
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see
that spectrum of
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punishment
is completely
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different
for a powerful person as compared to a
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general public
. For an instance A
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very
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famous
Bollywood star
was found
guilty for hunting deer and rash driving leading to death of four poor laborers.
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But
his power in terms of money, popularity made him free of guilty and no
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punishment
was announced
against him. If the same
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crime
was
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commited
by a common
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man
, he would be behind the bars long time ago.

However
, this trend of
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fixed
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punishments
also
has
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some
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negative
aspects. The primary drawback of this
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system
would be avoiding the circumstances.
For example
, if the
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crime
has
been committed
under pressure,
unintentionally
or in a planned way, all these things not considered could encourage
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criminals
as they knew that
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punishment
will be same and
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fixed
.

In conclusion
, having a
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fixed
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punishment
for all sorts of
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crimes
will definitely benefit the judicial
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system
in a way of quick response and unbiased judgements.
On the other hand
, may provoke
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criminals
and may increase the rate of
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crime
.
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IELTS essay many people in society believe that having fixed punishments for all crimes is a more efficient way of dealing with criminals in the justice system. what are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishments. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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