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Government should spend money on railway rather than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Government should spend money on railway rather than road. v. 1
Governments of any nation, have several responsibilities to give the quality of life to their citizens such as a good educational system, a reliable medical system and great transportation facilities. Whether an authority should spend funds on railways or roads, is a debatable issue among people. However, I firmly believe that both roads and railways are equally maintained, as both are equally preferred by citizens. To begin with, the use of personal vehicles is increasing day by day as it provides people round the clock mobility, comfort and flexibility and roads are the option solely to use the private auto-mobiles. Further, roads are the easiest option to reach the nearest place. Local people commute via buses, cabs and rickshaws, is the best example. However, dilapidated roads are the death traps. If roads are not constructed and maintained properly, people are likely to meet accidents which can be life threatening. For instance, according to a survey, conducted by a local newspaper, the reason of 60% accidents is the lack of maintenance. In spite of having a number of options to move around the country via roads, long journeys are usually preferred via trains and trams. As railways are less busy than roads, people can move rapidly by utilizing railways. Moreover, going via trains is more affordable by local people as it has very low fare as compared to buses on roads. But, un-maintained railway tracks are detrimental to passengers as railway accidents are more dangerous and a train has around a thousand people. For example, in Mumbai, a local train facilitates over seven hundred people at a time. To conclude, it is the responsibility of governments to give better facilities to citizens by repairing roads and railways, which can be definitely useful for people to save some lives.
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Governments
of any nation, have several responsibilities to give the quality of life to their citizens such as a
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good
educational system, a reliable medical system and great transportation facilities. Whether an authority should spend funds on
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railways
or
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roads
, is a debatable issue among
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people
.
However
, I
firmly
believe that both
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roads
and
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railways
are
equally
maintained, as both are
equally
preferred by citizens.

To
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begin
with, the
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use
of personal vehicles is increasing day by day as it provides
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people
round the clock mobility, comfort and flexibility and
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roads
are the option
solely
to
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use
the private auto-mobiles.
Further
,
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roads
are the easiest option to reach the nearest place.
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Local
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people
commute via buses, cabs and rickshaws, is the best example.
However
, dilapidated
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roads
are the death traps. If
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roads
are not constructed and maintained
properly
,
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people
are likely to
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meet
accidents which can be life threatening.
For instance
, according to a survey, conducted by a
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local
newspaper, the reason of 60% accidents is the lack of maintenance.

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In spite of
having a number of options to
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move
around the country via
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roads
, long journeys are
usually
preferred via
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trains
and trams. As
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railways
are less busy than
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roads
,
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people
can
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move
rapidly
by utilizing
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railways
.
Moreover
, going via
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trains
is more affordable by
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local
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people
as it has
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very
low fare as compared to buses on
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roads
.
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,
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un-maintained
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railway
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tracks
are detrimental to passengers as
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railway
accidents are more
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dangerous
and a
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train
has around a thousand
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people
.
For example
, in Mumbai, a
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local
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train
facilitates over seven hundred
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people
at a time.

To conclude
, it is the responsibility of
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governments
to give better facilities to citizens by repairing
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roads
and
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railways
, which can be definitely useful for
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people
to save
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some
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lives
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Government should spend money on railway rather than road. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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