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Some people think that a good way to reduce crime is longer sentences. others may think there are alternatives for this problemdiscuss both vews and give ur opinion v.1

Some people think that a good way to reduce crime is longer sentences. others may think there are alternatives for this problem 1
As we all know, it is a long journey for a person to become a scholar. Some people believe that team work will boost individual cognitive capacity. However, I agree with them under certain conditions. The essay will discuss my agreement with this view and also list my opinion against it. To begin with, it is a truth that team work will encourage the growth of cognitive intelligence and wisdom as long as all members are willing to cooperate together.  There is a Chinese saying, " In a group of people with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them. " During team work,  members will contribute the team in terms of  their various educational backgrounds, personal experiences and individual ideas.  People may learn new concepts during team work, which may not be learned from books or from personal life. Therefore, people have opportunities to practice their cognitive skills, such as logical thinking skills, expressing skills and summarizing skills, so that they become smarter via team activity. On the contrast, in some certain situations, team work may diminish the opportunities for the members' cognitive improvement. For instance, it is a tough task for team members who work together with opposite views in religions or politics. Therefore, in this condition, team work may create conflict and it is a challenging task for each member to reach the same agreement. This will distort participants' thought rather than helping them to obtain knowledge. In this condition, team work might affect the participants' intelligence growth. In conclusion, team activity may not always contribute to the growth of team member's cognitive skills. Whether team work will enhance the growth of an individual's intelligence will depend on many aspects of team members, such as personal values, religion and attitude as well. I personally agree that the majority of team work will help the participants to obtain knowledge and become wiser.
As we all know, it is a long journey for a person to become a scholar.
Some
people
believe that
team
work
will boost individual
cognitive
capacity.
However
, I
agree
with them under certain conditions. The essay will discuss my agreement with this view and
also
list my opinion against it.

To
begin
with, it is a truth that
team
work
will encourage the growth of
cognitive
intelligence and wisdom as long as all
members
are willing to cooperate together.  There is a Chinese saying,
"
In a group of
people
with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them.
"
During
team
work
,
 members
will contribute the
team
in terms of
  
their various educational backgrounds, personal experiences and individual
ideas
.  
People
may learn new concepts during
team
work
, which may not
be learned
from books or from personal life.
Therefore
,
people
have opportunities to practice their
cognitive
skills
, such as logical thinking
skills
, expressing
skills
and summarizing
skills
,
so
that they become smarter via
team
activity.

On the contrast, in
some
certain situations,
team
work
may diminish the opportunities for the members'
cognitive
improvement.
For instance
, it is a tough task for
team
members
who
work
together with opposite views in religions or politics.
Therefore
, in this condition,
team
work
may create conflict and it is a challenging task for each
member
to reach the same agreement. This will distort participants'
thought
rather
than helping them to obtain knowledge. In this condition,
team
work
might affect the participants' intelligence growth.

In conclusion
,
team
activity may not always contribute to the growth of
team
member's
cognitive
skills
. Whether
team
work
will enhance the growth of an individual's intelligence will depend on
many
aspects of
team
members
, such as personal values, religion and attitude
as well
. I
personally
agree
that the majority of
team
work
will
help
the participants to obtain knowledge and become wiser.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that a good way to reduce crime is longer sentences. others may think there are alternatives for this problem 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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