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Some people think studying on campus is the most effective way to learn while others believe that studying online is more effective, Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think studying on campus is the most effective way to learn while others believe that studying online is more effective, v. 1
Nowadays, there has been a colossal of different learning platforms. It is believed by a school of thought that tertiary learning done on campus is more valuable as compared to learning via the web. I opine to the fact that studying on campus. This essay will discuss online learning as the most effective studying avenue. To begin with, online learning is more cost efficient as one's ability to manage one's finances often times without loans. While this is cheaper, it also saves time. For example, by studying online, it is possible to attend lectures in the comfort of one's home through the use of internet connection. This form of studying is equivalent or rather, better off when compared to studying on campus. Furthermore, web based learning is flexible as lectures are often times already prepared for to watch at one's own time. More so, it is able to cater for the old who sees themselves as too aged to partake in campus studying. In contrast, campus learning does not cut across all boards in the sense that it is most often times limited to a particular age group. For instance, an aged man might be reluctant to learn with much younger people. However, with the online system of learning, the elderly could learn in their comfort area or environment. This on the other hand, encourages good confidence level whilst also makes them happy. In conclusion, this essay has discussed the efficiency of online learning as against campus learning. Online learning plays some major significant roles such as cubbing excess financial issues and encourages better management of time.
Nowadays, there has been
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thought
that tertiary
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learning
done on
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campus
is more valuable as compared to
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learning
via the web. I opine to the fact that
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studying
on
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campus
. This essay will discuss
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online
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learning
as the most effective
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avenue.

To
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learning
is more
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cost efficient
as one's ability to manage one's finances
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without loans. While this is cheaper, it
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, it is possible to attend lectures in the comfort of one's home through the
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use
of internet connection. This form of
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is equivalent or
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on
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.
Furthermore
, web based
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is flexible as lectures are
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already prepared for to
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, it is able to cater for the
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who
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In contrast
,
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does not
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cut
across all boards in the sense that it is most
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limited to a particular age group.
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man
might be reluctant to learn with much younger
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people
.
However
, with the
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system of
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, the elderly could learn in their comfort area or environment. This
on the other hand
, encourages
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good
confidence level whilst
also
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makes
them happy.

In conclusion
, this essay has discussed the efficiency of
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online
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learning
as against
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campus
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learning
.
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Online
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plays
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major significant roles such as
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excess financial issues and encourages better management of
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.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think studying on campus is the most effective way to learn while others believe that studying online is more effective, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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