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Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. v.1

Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. v. 1
Parents take care of their children at every step. While some people believe that parents should teach children different stories, others believe that parents should not involve in that as children have the ability to understand and analyse those stories and lessons by themselves. There are many benefits of teaching children by parents on stories. Children can understand stories by reading themselves, but not up to the level as older people can. As they grow up their analysing ability also will increase. Hence if parents make them understand stories by reading and translating, they can understand much better.   Not only that, if children start reading and watching stories by themselves, there is a possibility of misunderstanding  the concept of stories (If Moral stories), and also possibility of choosing the bad programs and stories by themselves. For instance, old people always advise parents to teach children good moral stories, which are used for them to improve and understand the values of a human being. However, some people believe that parents should not always hold children for each and every step, as they read books, watch TV, so have the ability to understand the stories by reading themselves. People say that there are a lot of differences in today’s children compared to older days. It is proved that these day’s children have the ability to understand the situations and act according to that, they not only read stories but also can teach to others.   For example, in today’s schools, children who have just started schooling can learn and involve in multiple tasks much faster than their parents. To sum up, though today’s children have the ability to analyse situations and stories much better, it is always the responsibility of parents to look after on how well they understand it. It depends on each child, how good they analyse.
Parents
take care of their
children
at every step. While
some
people
believe that
parents
should teach
children
different
stories
, others believe that
parents
should not involve in that as
children
have the
ability
to
understand
and
analyse
those
stories
and lessons by themselves.

There are
many
benefits of teaching
children
by
parents
on
stories
.
Children
can
understand
stories
by
reading
themselves,
but
not up to the level as older
people
can.
As
they grow up their
analysing
ability
also
will increase.
Hence
if
parents
make
them
understand
stories
by
reading
and translating, they can
understand
much better.
 
Not
only
that, if
children
start
reading
and watching
stories
by themselves, there is a possibility of misunderstanding
 
the concept of
stories
(If Moral
stories)
, and
also
possibility of choosing the
bad
programs and
stories
by themselves.
For instance
,
old
people
always advise
parents
to teach
children
good
moral
stories
, which are
used
for them to
improve
and
understand
the values of a human being.

However
,
some
people
believe that
parents
should not always hold
children
for each and every step, as they read books,
watch
TV,
so
have the
ability
to
understand
the
stories
by
reading
themselves.
People
say that there are
a lot of
differences in
today
’s
children
compared to older days. It
is proved
that
these day
’s
children
have the
ability
to
understand
the situations and act according to that, they not
only
read
stories
but
also
can teach to others.
 
For example
, in
today
’s schools,
children
who have
just
started
schooling can learn and involve in multiple tasks much faster than their parents.

To sum up, though
today
’s
children
have the
ability
to
analyse
situations and
stories
much better, it is always the responsibility of
parents
to look after on how well they
understand
it. It depends on each child, how
good
they
analyse
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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