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Some people think it’s better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. However, others believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending the same school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think it’s better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. However, others believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending the same school. v. 1
Although some people believe that studying in separate school for boys and girls is better, some people thinks matching boys and girls in the same school has got advantage result. I agree with the last view and I think studying together has got more benefit. First of all, studying in the same school has a many benefit for boys and girls. one of that is learning to live together in the society. In the other word, we can't separate male and female in the society. Therefore, school is a good place for learning some ability is useful in the real life. Student should learn how can they do in future life. For example, if one of them wants to decide to get married, and he/she doesn't have any idea about behaviour of partner in general, it is possible to choose wrong make mistake. This is why it is a good idea for knows them self in the school as a gender. However, some people think that it’s better if girls and boys has a special school for different gender. One of the reasons is for focusing on the lessons. This group think, studying in a same school for boys and girls, doesn't help to competition between them and finally improving. In this age they want to get pay attention, so try to spend a time for make nice appearance. Such as a girl who likes to do make up. I should mention that I am not agree with this idea. In conclusion, I think studying in the same school helps boys and girls to grow up as human. I mean without thinking about gender. It also helps them for knowing each other as a person how living in the society.
Although
some
people
believe that
studying
in separate
school
for
boys
and
girls
is better,
some
people
thinks
matching
boys
and
girls
in the same
school
has
got
advantage result. I
agree
with the last view and I
think
studying
together has
got
more benefit.

First of all
,
studying
in the same
school
has a
many benefit
for
boys
and
girls
.
one
of
that is
learning to
live
together in the society. In the other word, we can't separate male and female in the society.
Therefore
,
school
is a
good
place for learning
some
ability is useful in the real life. Student should learn how can they do in future life.
For example
, if one of them wants to decide to
get
married, and he/she doesn't have any
idea
about
behaviour
of partner
in general
, it is possible to choose
wrong
make
mistake. This is why it is a
good
idea
for knows them self in the
school
as a gender.

However
,
some
people
think
that it’s better if
girls
and
boys
has a special
school
for
different
gender. One of the reasons is for focusing on the lessons. This group
think
,
studying
in a same
school
for
boys
and
girls
, doesn't
help
to competition between them and
finally
improving. In this age they want to
get
pay attention,
so
try to spend a time for
make
nice appearance. Such as a
girl
who likes to do
make
up. I should mention that I am not
agree
with this
idea
.

In conclusion
, I
think
studying
in the same
school
helps
boys
and
girls
to grow up as human. I mean without thinking about gender. It
also
helps
them for knowing each other as a person how living in the society.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it’s better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. However, others believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending the same school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
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