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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 2
People are created differently and each have their own characteristics and thoughts. Some may choose to pick friends who are most similar to them while other may choose to pick friends who most different to them. On one side, there are people who prefer to have friends who share the same idea. For most obvious reason, these people have less debate with their friends and for sure, this leads to longer and stronger relationship. Similarly, these group have similar hobbies and lifestyles. If someone likes to go to cinema or spend time visiting historical places at his weekend, he will have has easier job convincing a friend who has the same interest and obviously, this is the important advantage for those with limited time or options. On the opposing side, there are people who share the idea that friends should not have identical thinking style. certainly, for first reason, friends with different mindset have different view of angle for various topics and this feature, for example, helps them to consider other possibilities when tackling an issue as having opposing idea assists to develop and mature their ideas. in addition, such friendship can more adventurous for them because such friendship gave them the opportunity to discover new possibilities. To sum up, people may decide to have friends who share the same belief or have different one for any reason. However, I believe taking rigid and strong side is an absolute mistake and best is to take balance approach. I think we both group of individuals are necessary for us as there are both advantages and disadvantages with them.
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prefer to have
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. For most obvious reason, these
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people
have less debate with their
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and for sure, this leads to longer and stronger relationship.
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friend
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people
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helps
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assists to develop and mature their
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.
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addition, such friendship can more adventurous for them
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such friendship gave them the opportunity to discover new possibilities.

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we both group of individuals are necessary for us as there are both advantages and disadvantages with them.
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IELTS essay Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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