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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.12

Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 12
It is believed that friends are important in developing the one's character. Whilst some argue that having friends with the same perspectives is advantageous, others think that making friends with some differences is useful. I am of the belief that friends may have different opinions regarding some points. In the following lines, both points of view will be further discussed. To begin with, choosing friends who have the same opinions enhances the people's achievements. This is because friends, all of whom have the same perspective tend to advocate each other by sharing their experiences. Moreover, they usually have a lot of information regarding the same topics so that they could become experts in any desired field. For instance, as per an article published by The Guardian in 2019, many of the brilliant British high school students admitted having friends who usually get high scores in their exams. This example reflects that the more the students have the same educational value opinion, the more they will get higher marks in their subjects. In contrast, having friends who have some diverse opinions improves diversity. To illustrate, the friends' differences enriches their knowledge in many life aspects since they used to have various beliefs. When people make friends with different ethnic background individuals, they will learn new cultures which they were not familiar with. This is exemplified by the students who study abroad; they educate their colleagues about new types of dishes. Hence, if these students had had the same opinions, they would have exposed to the same lifestyle. In conclusion, although friends with the same opinions may encourage each other, I believe that the diversity of the friends' viewpoints will broaden their horizons.
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in developing the one's character. Whilst
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some
argue that having
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friends
with the same perspectives is advantageous, others
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think
that making
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friends
with
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differences is useful. I am of the belief that
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friends
may have
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different
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opinions
regarding
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some
points. In the following lines, both points of view will be
further
discussed.

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with, choosing
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have the same
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enhances the
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people
's achievements. This is
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because
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friends
, all of whom have the same perspective tend to advocate each other by sharing their experiences.
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, they
usually
have
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a lot of
information regarding the same topics
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so
that they could become experts in any desired field.
For instance
, as per an article published by The Guardian in 2019,
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many
of the brilliant British high school
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students
admitted having
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friends
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usually
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get
high scores in their exams. This example reflects that the more the
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students
have the same educational value
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opinion
, the more they will
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get
higher marks in their subjects.

In contrast
, having
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have
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some
diverse
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diversity. To illustrate, the friends' differences enriches their knowledge in
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life aspects since they
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used
to have various beliefs. When
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people
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make
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with
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different
ethnic background individuals, they will learn new cultures which they were not familiar with. This
is exemplified
by the
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students
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who
study abroad; they educate their colleagues about new types of dishes.
Hence
, if these
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students
had had the same
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opinions
, they would have exposed to the same lifestyle.

In conclusion
, although
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friends
with the same
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opinions
may encourage each other, I believe that the diversity of the friends' viewpoints will broaden their horizons.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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