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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v.2

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 2
Teaching school children about parenthood is considered as a better approach by some people. This essay will describe the shortcomings of training the good parenthood concepts in schools and discuss necessary aspects for being a good parent. The young minds are curious and often interested in having fun, teaching them about good parenting may influence them negatively. For instance, the children may start judging their parents with the concepts they learn at school. Moreover, they may get into depression and could also force themselves to extreme negative situations, when they realize that their parents are not the best. Conversely, students must be taught to respect their parents and engage them to adapt to their respective situations confidently. Coming to the good parenthood, being a good parent begins with taking the responsibility for being a father or mother. A person should understand that a child needs a nurturing ambience with lots of love and care and be prepared before becoming one. Being responsible for oneself, such as their lifestyle, language and behavior is an important factor for a good parent. For example, a study by Jadavpur University, sociology department demonstrated that, 80% of the children grew up with quarrelling parents, may turn into criminals or may develop suicidal tendencies as they grow up. To sum up, becoming good parents will not result through schooling, but by understanding what it takes to become one and by having the commitment for it. Admittedly, for being a good parent it is important to be a good human being, and becoming a parent is a wakeup call for one who is not.
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. This essay will
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the shortcomings of training the
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parenthood concepts in schools and discuss necessary aspects for being a
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good
parent.

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interested in having fun, teaching them about
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parenting may influence them
negatively
.
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, the children may
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start
judging their
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parents
with the concepts they learn at school.
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, they may
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get
into depression and could
also
force themselves to extreme
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negative
situations, when they realize that their
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parents
are not the best.
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, students
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must
be taught
to respect their
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parents
and engage them to adapt to their respective situations
confidently
.

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parenthood, being a
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good
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parent
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begins
with taking the responsibility for being a father or mother. A person should understand that a child needs a nurturing ambience with lots of
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love
and care and
be prepared
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before
becoming one. Being responsible for oneself, such as their lifestyle, language and behavior is an
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important
factor for a
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good
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.
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, a study by
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Jadavpur
University, sociology department demonstrated that, 80% of the children grew up with quarrelling
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parents
, may turn into criminals or may develop suicidal tendencies as they grow up.

To sum up, becoming
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good
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parents
will not result through schooling,
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but
by understanding what it takes to become one and by having the commitment for it.
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, for being a
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parent
it is
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to be a
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human being, and becoming a
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is a
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call for one who is not.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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