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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v.1

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 1
Parenthood is considered one of the hardest titles to do justice with. A lot of people are simply lost and dont have enough knowledge to handle the title bestowed upon them. That's why some of us think its necessary that everyone should learn this as a skill and should know how to be a good parent, as a part of their formal education. I happen to agree with this opinion. Firstly, schooling is almost a mandatory period in the life of most of world's population. It is this young and impressionable age where the mind is ready to grasp new ideas, quickly. Being a good parent is one of the most necessary requirement for a balanced and healthy household, which makes it the perfect thing to be included in the list of talents to be acquired. In other words, schools should also provide the social grooming to succeed in life, along with educational lessons. Secondly, to be a good parent, a person needs to be social, responsible and mature. All of these traits are absolutely necessary to take care of a child, but also helps in the other aspects of life. For example, if a teenager knows what is expected of him/her to be a good parent, they would make a more focused effort to become an individual that can be a good mother or father. Lastly, I believe the world would be a much better place, if every kid would have good parents and hence can get all the love and care that they deserve.
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one of the hardest titles to do justice with.
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of us
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think
its necessary that everyone should learn this as a
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skill
and should know how to be a
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parent
, as a part of their formal education. I happen to
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agree
with this opinion.

Firstly
, schooling is almost a mandatory period in the life of most of world's population. It is this young and impressionable age where the mind is ready to grasp new
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ideas
,
quickly
. Being a
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good
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parent
is one of the most necessary requirement for a balanced and healthy household, which
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makes
it the perfect thing to
be included
in the list of talents to
be acquired
.
In other words
, schools should
also
provide the social grooming to succeed in life, along with educational lessons.

Secondly
, to be a
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good
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parent
, a person needs to be social, responsible and mature. All of these traits are
absolutely
necessary to take care of a child,
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but
also
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helps
in the other aspects of life.
For example
, if a
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teenager
knows what is
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expected
of him/her to be a
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good
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parent
, they would
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make
a more focused effort to become an individual that can be a
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good
mother or father.

Lastly
, I believe the world would be a much better place, if every kid would have
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good
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parents
and
hence
can
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get
all the
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love
and care that they deserve.
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11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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