Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5
Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. v. 5
Health is a major concern and hot topic all the time to discuss. Major diseases are increasing and quality of life is decreasing nowadays. I believe that prevention is better than cure. I strongly agree that governments should spend money and time to promote healthy lifestyles, in order to prevent the diseases than spending money that who are suffering from terminal illness.
Firstly terminal illness, like cancer, renal disease, delirium all this cannot be cured can only manage the symptoms experienced by clients. Secondly how much money we spend on this diseases also only can increase the lifespan and not able to provide quality of life. However, all this terminal illness can be preventable, if they take care themselves from maintaining healthy habits. Thirdly, to treat and manage these terminal diseases the cost of treatment is very high. However, people use insurance and med save, still not enough that money they need to top-up additionally to take treatment. Many clients they unable to manage them and hospitalised frequently.
Coming to the prevention of diseases, many people were educated in this modern world, so that easy to educate everybody on how to prevent diseases and as well as to promote quality of life. The government should spend the money to advertise on healthy eating habits, management of stress, diseases caused by drinking alcohol and smoking. Many major diseases caused by long-term diseases, for example, diabetes and hypertension. The government should conduct free health camps at least twice a year to screen the people and give the health education how to manage diabetes, hypertension. So that people can manage their health at home and also can prevent major diseases caused by them.
To sum up, since, many major diseases caused by poor healthy habits, stress and long-term diseases. So that I strongly agree that government spend the money on advertising on how to prevent illness than cure the terminal illness.
Health
is a
major
concern and hot topic all the time to discuss.
Major
diseases
are increasing and quality of life is decreasing nowadays. I believe that prevention is better than cure. I
strongly
agree
that
governments
should
spend
money
and time to promote
healthy
lifestyles, in order to
prevent
the
diseases
than spending
money
that who are suffering from
terminal
illness.
Firstly
terminal
illness
, like cancer, renal
disease
, delirium all this cannot
be cured
can
only
manage
the symptoms experienced by clients.
Secondly
how much
money
we
spend
on
this
diseases
also
only
can increase the lifespan and not able to provide quality of life.
However
, all this
terminal
illness
can be preventable, if they take care themselves from maintaining
healthy
habits.
Thirdly
, to treat and
manage
these
terminal
diseases
the cost of treatment is
very
high.
However
,
people
use
insurance and med save,
still
not
enough
that
money
they need to top-up
additionally
to take treatment.
Many
clients
they
unable to
manage
them and
hospitalised
frequently
.
Coming to the prevention of
diseases
,
many
people
were educated
in this modern world,
so
that easy to educate everybody on how to
prevent
diseases
and
as well
as to promote quality of life. The
government
should
spend
the
money
to advertise on
healthy
eating habits, management of
stress
,
diseases
caused
by drinking alcohol and smoking.
Many
major
diseases
caused
by long-term
diseases
,
for example
, diabetes and hypertension. The
government
should conduct free
health
camps at least twice a year to screen the
people
and give the
health
education how to
manage
diabetes, hypertension.
So
that
people
can
manage
their
health
at home and
also
can
prevent
major
diseases
caused
by them.
To sum up, since,
many
major
diseases
caused
by poor
healthy
habits,
stress
and long-term
diseases
.
So that
I
strongly
agree
that
government
spend
the
money
on advertising on how to
prevent
illness
than cure the
terminal
illness
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes