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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal? v.8

Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal? v. 8
From the western countries' point of view, owning things is something really important. In fact, it can describe your social status and fulfil your life with every possession available. Thus, it's not a surprise that the objective of these countries is to produce more and more goods and materials. Economically, it is a great idea, because the surplus will be sold to other countries that need them, for an increased price in order to gain an income, while the required amount of them is satisfied with the minimum effort for the producer country. For example, we can look at the production of weapons in Italy, they sell weapons to almost every country in the world and they but it's a crime to own weapons without a special permission as a hunter or a member of the police or army. The main problem with this conception is that there are billion of items that remain unsold and they will become trash later. For the most part, this huge amount of garbage will be processed and digested. Whereas, there are also some of them that can't be recycled. In particular, the plastic items. Therefore, they will stay in the environment for thousands of years and we can just find them in our oceans, seas, rivers and so on. In conclusion, I think that every country should focus less on producing plastic items, weapons and harmful objects. Instead they should try to switch to recyclable options and renewable energy sources like water and wind.
From the western countries' point of view, owning things is something
really
important
. In fact, it can
describe
your social status and fulfil your life with every possession available.
Thus
, it's not a surprise that the objective of these
countries
is to produce more and more
goods
and materials.

Economically
, it is a great
idea
,
because
the surplus will
be sold
to other
countries
that need them, for an increased price in order to gain an income, while the required amount of them
is satisfied
with the minimum effort for the producer
country
.
For example
, we can look at the production of
weapons
in Italy, they sell
weapons
to almost every
country
in the
world and
they
but
it's a crime to
own
weapons
without a special permission as a hunter or a member of the police or army.

The main problem with this conception is that there are
billion
of items that remain
unsold and
they will become trash later.
For the most part
, this huge amount of garbage will
be processed
and digested.
Whereas
, there are
also
some
of them that can't
be recycled
.
In particular
, the plastic items.
Therefore
, they will stay in the environment for thousands of
years and
we can
just
find them in our oceans, seas, rivers and
so
on.

In conclusion
, I
think
that every
country
should focus less on producing plastic items,
weapons
and harmful objects.
Instead
they should try to switch to recyclable options and renewable energy sources like water and wind.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal? v. 8

Essay
  American English
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251 words
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