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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.4

Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. with this opinion? v. 4
There are plethora jobs all around the world and people choose different professions in their life according to their talents. But few people change their course whenever they feel stressed in their current work. Even though the people do the race, which they like after a few years they will feel bored and stressed. Sometimes it may cause psychological problems. So it becomes important for the people to conversion their profession for their mental relief. But the person who needs to deviation his course need face few problems like interviews, economical problems, etc. . . . So people can their professions as they wish and due to these psychological problems in people can be reduced. But in other hands changing the carer is not acceptable because if the people modify their job as they wish the company need to face several problems in lack of employers so it affects the economic growth of the company. In some cases even though the person was a genius he may find some problem in getting a new job. So it is suggested that people need to resign their profession after completing the arrangements for the new career. In some cases, people resign their job to find their new race due to their unlucky they won't get any new task. So they will be left unemployed. But lucky people will get employment. So at one point of view, it is a good activity, but in another point of view it' dangerous. So it is advised for the people to love their profession that they do and they should not think it as a stress. So as discussed changing the career has both merits and demerits
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all around the world and
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in their life according to their talents.
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few
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people
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their course whenever they feel
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stressed
in their
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do the race, which they like after a few years they will feel bored and
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stressed
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problems
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it becomes
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important
for the
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people
to conversion their
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profession
for their mental relief.
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the person who
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needs
to deviation his course
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need
face few
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problems
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reduced
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in other hands changing the carer is not acceptable
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modify their
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job
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company
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in lack of employers
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it affects the economic growth of the
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. In
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cases
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some
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in getting a
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is suggested
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people
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need
to resign their
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profession
after completing the arrangements for the
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new
career.

In
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some
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unemployed.
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lucky
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will
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at one point of view, it is a
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they should not
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as discussed changing the career has both merits and demerits
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One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. with this opinion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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