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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. v.4

Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. v. 4
Recently it has become a matter debate whether history play and important role in our life on the other hand, some people believes that there is no impact or value in our present. I strongly support history as its help us know many things and we can learn a lot. This essay will shed light on the same point that why it is vital for everyone in the society and it has an impact on our present. To begin with, studying history is necessary because it holds amazing information, results, test, from the past and we can study them and correct our self in the current situation. moreover, it is worth having profound insights into historical in order to understand the contemporary life and deal with the situations and experiments. We know our rituals and get to know about the battles and war happen to save the country. Through subjects like historical information people get to know about the development what is going surrounding. Consequently, it is helpful to uplift the standard of any country by avoiding past mistakes. For example, there was a survey in JAPAN shows that people who taught historical subjects compulsory are more adaptive in decision making rather than others who were not. In conclusion, we should always keep on learning from the past and improve our self to have a better future and our history is the base and from their experiences we can learn and change the society. Thus, The history of any nation is an ocean of knowledge which is beneficial to develop the power of analysis.
Recently it has become a matter debate whether
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history
play and
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role in our life
on the other hand
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people
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believes
that there is no impact or value in our present. I
strongly
support
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history
as its
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help
us
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know
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many
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things and
we can learn a lot. This essay will shed light on the same point that why it is vital for everyone in the society and it has an impact on our present.

To
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begin
with, studying
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history
is necessary
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because
it holds amazing information, results,
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test
, from the
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past and
we can study them and correct our self in the
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current
situation.
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moreover
, it is worth having profound insights into historical in order to understand the contemporary life and deal with the situations and experiments.

We
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know
our rituals and
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get
to
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know
about the battles and war happen to save the country. Through subjects like historical information
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people
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get
to
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know
about the development what is going surrounding.
Consequently
, it is helpful to uplift the standard of any country by avoiding past mistakes.
For example
, there was a survey in JAPAN
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shows
that
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people
who taught historical subjects compulsory are more adaptive in
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decision making
rather
than others who were not.

In conclusion
, we should always
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keep
on learning from the past and
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improve
our self to have a better future and our
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history
is the base and from their experiences we can learn and
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change
the society.
Thus
, The
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history
of any nation is an ocean of knowledge which is beneficial to develop the power of analysis.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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