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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but other think studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but other think studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your opinion. v. 2
Each and every country has their own religious as well as economical history. Some ethnicities think that it is futile or waste of time to study history and its events while others believe that there is always something as a takeaway message by contemplating the past history. I discussed both the views, its advantages and disadvantages in following paragraphs about the history. In this contemporary world every information is readily available on mobile devices, thus it is no more compulsion to find a place to like a library to study history and its events. Nevertheless, people are underestimating not only other countries’ history but also their own country’s past significant events. Busy lifestyles of today’s generation can not let them read and study historical narratives and instead make them to focus and develop their innate skills. For example, Norway is the busiest country in term of work culture as per the recent census, so citizens of that country could not spare time to learn about their own country’s history, though the country has a beautiful one. This led them to develop a mindset that history has very little or nothing to tell us instead they focus on increasing the required skills which are suggested by their employer. However, most population of the world are in favor of understanding at least their own county’s history which might lead them to better present and so to the better future. All the people are living in social communities and these ethnicities are the part of their culture which derived from their religious history. Spiritual communities grasp history’s connected events and its takeaway messages to evolve as a perfect human being. For instance, Indian Hindu society is exactly following the footsteps of a religious book named Bhagvat Geeta to promote their self to the higher realms, spiritually. Secondly, many of the economical fraternities has been studying history to understand the present market trends. For example, the American government and businessmen are too smart to take financial decisions based on the historical event and its outcomes. These couple of examples clearly state that how history is important for the individuals as well as for the country’s well being. To conclude, I believe that one should learn at least the basics of history which help them to be a better human being, overall. As per my view history and its events always have something in store for each person, no matter where they live or what beliefs they have.
Each and every
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country
has their
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own
religious
as well
as
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economical
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history
.
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Some
ethnicities
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think
that it is futile or waste of time to study
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history
and its
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events
while others believe that there is always something as a takeaway message by contemplating the past
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history
. I discussed both the views, its advantages and disadvantages in following paragraphs about the history.

In this contemporary world every information is
readily
available on mobile devices,
thus
it is no more compulsion to find a place to like a library to study
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history
and its
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events
.
Nevertheless
,
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people
are underestimating not
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only
other
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countries’
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history
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but
also
their
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own
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country’s
past significant
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events
. Busy lifestyles of
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today
’s generation can not
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let
them read and study historical narratives and
instead
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make
them to focus and develop their innate
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skills
.
For example
, Norway is the busiest
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country
in term of work culture as per the recent census,
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so
citizens of that
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country
could not spare time to learn about their
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own
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country’s
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history
, though the
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country
has a
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beautiful
one. This led them to develop a mindset that
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history
has
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very
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little
or nothing to
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tell
us
instead
they focus on increasing the required
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skills
which
are suggested
by their employer.
However
, most population of the world are in favor of understanding at least their
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own
county’s
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history
which might lead them to better present and
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so
to the better future.

All the
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people
are living in social communities and these ethnicities are the part of their culture which derived from their religious
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history
. Spiritual communities grasp
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history’s
connected
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events
and its takeaway messages to evolve as a perfect human being.
For instance
, Indian Hindu society is exactly following the footsteps of a religious book named
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Bhagvat
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Geeta
to promote their self to the higher realms,
spiritually
.
Secondly
,
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many
of the economical fraternities has been studying
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history
to understand the present market trends.
For example
, the American
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government
and businessmen are too smart to take financial decisions based on the historical
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event
and its outcomes. These couple of examples
clearly
state that how
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history
is
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important
for the individuals
as well
as for the
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country’s
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well being
.

To conclude
, I believe that one should learn at least the basics of
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history
which
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help
them to be a better human being,
overall
. As per my view
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history
and its
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events
always have something in store for each person, no matter where they
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live
or what beliefs they have.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
Learning is a treasure that will follow its owner everywhere.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but other think studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
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