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Some people think governments should spend money looking for life on other planets, while others think that there are many unsolved problems on earth. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think governments should spend money looking for life on other planets, while others think that there are many unsolved problems on earth. v. 1
With the recent development of technology, people’s interests have changed in many ways. One of the evident changes is that the number of people interested in other planets is increasing nowadays. They maintain that governments should spend money looking for extraterrestrial life, however, others argue that there are a lot of unsolved problems on Earth. This essay will discuss the both opinions with examples and reasons as following paragraphs. To begin with, there are people who support the idea that governments should invest in finding life on other planets. The main reason for believing this is that it will be helpful to mankind. For instance, in recent decades, humankind has suffered from several serious diseases such as epidemic. However, they believe it can be solved through new creatures like new bacteria. The second reason is that human beings can develop scientific technology. In order to look for life on other planets, it is necessary to develop scientific technology. These challenges will be useful not only scientific technology but also other areas such as medical industry. On the other hand, there are certain people who hold a different opinion and think that governments should deal with unsolved problems on Earth. Firstly, there are still a lot of people suffering from poverty in the world. For example, the poverty rate is still increasing nowadays in particular areas. The second reason is that looking for extraterrestrial creatures needs spending a lot of money, which is not even guaranteed success. Therefore, governments should spend money for the general public. To conclude, the both opinion of this issue have been discussed in this essay with reasons mentioned above. I personally believe that dealing with unsolved problems in the world is more important than looking for life on other planets.
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technology
,
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people’s
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changed
in
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many
ways. One of the evident
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changes
is that the number of
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people
interested in
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other
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planets
is increasing nowadays. They maintain that
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governments
should spend money looking for extraterrestrial
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life
,
however
, others argue that there are
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a lot of
unsolved problems on Earth. This essay will discuss the both opinions with examples and
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reasons
as following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, there are
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people
who support the
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idea
that
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governments
should invest in finding
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life
on
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other
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planets
. The main
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reason
for believing this is that it will be helpful to mankind.
For instance
, in recent decades, humankind has suffered from several serious diseases such as epidemic.
However
, they believe it can
be solved
through new creatures like new bacteria. The second
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reason
is that human beings can develop scientific
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technology
. In order to look for
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life
on
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other
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planets
, it is necessary to develop scientific
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technology
. These challenges will be useful not
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only
scientific
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technology
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but
also
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other
areas such as medical industry.

On the
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other
hand, there are certain
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people
who hold a
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different
opinion and
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think
that
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governments
should deal with unsolved problems on Earth.
Firstly
, there are
still
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a lot of
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people
suffering from poverty in the world.
For example
, the poverty rate is
still
increasing nowadays
in particular
areas. The second
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reason
is that looking for extraterrestrial creatures needs spending
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a lot of
money, which is not even guaranteed success.
Therefore
,
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governments
should spend money for the
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general public
.

To conclude
, the both opinion of this issue have
been discussed
in this essay with
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reasons
mentioned above. I
personally
believe that dealing with unsolved problems in the world is more
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important
than looking for
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life
on
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other
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planets
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think governments should spend money looking for life on other planets, while others think that there are many unsolved problems on earth. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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