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Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. v. 4
With the increasing engineered food products, more and more people become vegetarian in order to have a healthy diet. Some people argue that every individual has to become vegetarian because meat intake is unnecessary. Personally, I completely disagree with this statement with the following argument. On the one hand, people who selected to be a vegetarian is caused by two primary reasons. To begin with, it is believed that, eating more vegetable in daily intake is good for people’s health. It is true that vegetables are far less chemical use than meat in food production program and sole eating vegetable may reduce the risk of some disease such as heart disease, diabetes and hypertension. Additional, some vegetarian reject to eat meat products due to they cannot stand on the animal killing. This sort of people not only themselves but also try to stop others to have a meat diet. Obviously, this campaign is not suitable for current society because all citizens have the rights to choose what they like or dislike. On the other hand, meat intake is necessary and suitable for the human body. First of all, taking meat would generate more energy to deal with physical activities. For instance, red meat and white meat are content richer protein and fibre than vegetable which are essential components in human bodybuilding. Besides, there are some components sole exist in meat products. In other word, vegetables are the sole food resources for the vegetarian, though they have to take some chemical medicine in order to keep the body healthy. In conclusion, although more vegetable intake is absolutely benefited to our healthy, no one can make a decision for other people about what they have to take. From my point of view, I strongly disagree every single person should be turning to a vegetarian.
With the increasing engineered food products, more and more
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people
become vegetarian in order to have a healthy diet.
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Some
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people
argue that every individual
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has to
become vegetarian
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because
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meat
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intake
is unnecessary.
Personally
, I completely disagree with this statement with the following argument.

On the one hand,
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people
who selected to be a vegetarian
is caused
by two primary reasons. To
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begin
with, it
is believed
that, eating more
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vegetable
in daily
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intake
is
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good
for
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people’s
health. It is true that
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vegetables
are far less chemical
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use
than
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meat
in food production program and sole eating
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vegetable
may
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reduce
the
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risk
of
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some
disease such as heart disease, diabetes and hypertension. Additional,
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some
vegetarian reject to eat
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meat
products due to they cannot stand on the animal killing. This sort of
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people
not
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only
themselves
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but
also
try to
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stop
others to have a
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meat
diet.
Obviously
, this campaign is not suitable for
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current
society
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because
all citizens have the rights to choose what they like or dislike.

On the
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other
hand,
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meat
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intake
is necessary and suitable for the human body.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, taking
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meat
would generate more energy to deal with physical activities.
For instance
, red
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meat
and white
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meat
are content richer protein and
Possible spelling mistake. 'fibre' is British English.
fibre
than
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vegetable
which are essential components in human bodybuilding.
Besides
, there are
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some
components sole exist in
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meat
products. In
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other
word,
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vegetables
are the sole food resources for the vegetarian, though they
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have to
take
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some
chemical medicine in order to
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keep
the body healthy.

In conclusion
, although more
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vegetable
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intake
is
absolutely
benefited to our healthy, no one can
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make
a decision for
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other
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people
about what they
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have to
take. From my point of view, I
strongly
disagree every single person should be turning to a vegetarian.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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