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Human beings do not need to eat meal in order to maintain good health because they can get all their food needs from meatless products and substitute vegetarian diet is as healthy as diet containing meat argue for or against the opinion above. v.1

Human beings do not need to eat meal in order to maintain good health because they can get all their food needs from meatless products and substitute vegetarian diet is as healthy as diet containing meat argue for or against the opinion above. v. 1
Stress has become a big problem in today’s life. Individuals feel stress than before as they have to work for a longer period of time. This essay will discuss the main causes, including excessively high workload and lack of interpersonal support. This essay will also suggest solutions, including hiring more workers and allocating with a job they are expert at. To begin with, people feel more pressurised because of overloaded task, with unrealistic deadlines. This happens when there are not enough number of workers in the department for each type of duties. Next is when the co-workers are not supportive. One might discourage the work has been done by others. For example, when workers ask for help in a particular work, their colleagues might not be supportive as they have a feeling that their talents will grow and will be awarded by the boss. This result, taking a long time to complete the task and increases tension. There are a lot of steps employees can take to cope up with task related stress. Firstly, to hire more staff, according to the department and the workload. So, they can run the organisation smoothly without causing tension to the employees. Furthermore, by training the staff and allocating them with the jobs they are best suited. This will reduce their work pressure, in addition they will use their knowledge efficiently. A recent study shows that, training staff after hiring is an investment for the company. Therefore, they won’t have to be on duty for an extra hour and feel exhausted. To conclude, tension is increasing as people have to be at the office for extra hours because of overloaded duties and insufficient help from peers. This issue can be minimised if the superior hire more employee and provide them with the job they are interested in.
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big
problem in
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today
’s life. Individuals feel
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stress
than
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before
as they
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have to
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work
for a longer period of time. This essay will discuss the main causes, including
excessively
high workload and lack of interpersonal support. This essay will
also
suggest solutions, including hiring more workers and allocating with a job they are expert at.

To
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begin
with,
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people
feel more
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pressurised
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because
of overloaded task, with unrealistic deadlines. This happens when there are not
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enough
number of workers in the department for each type of duties.
Next
is when the co-workers are not supportive. One might discourage the
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work
has
been done
by others.
For example
, when workers
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ask for
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help
in a particular
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work
, their colleagues might not be supportive as they have a feeling that their talents will grow and will
be awarded
by the boss. This result, taking a long time to complete the task and increases tension.

There are
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a lot of
steps employees can take to cope up with task related
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stress
.
Firstly
, to hire more staff, according to the department and the workload.
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So
, they can run the
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organisation
smoothly
without causing tension to the employees.
Furthermore
, by training the staff and allocating them with the jobs they are best suited. This will
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reduce
their
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work
pressure,
in addition
they will
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use
their knowledge
efficiently
. A recent study
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shows
that, training staff after hiring is an investment for the
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company
.
Therefore
, they won’t
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have to
be on duty for an extra hour and feel exhausted.

To conclude
, tension is increasing as
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people
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have to
be at the office for extra hours
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because
of overloaded duties and insufficient
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help
from peers. This issue can be
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minimised
if the superior hire more employee and provide them with the job they
are interested
in.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Human beings do not need to eat meal in order to maintain good health because they can get all their food needs from meatless products and substitute vegetarian diet is as healthy as diet containing meat argue for or against the opinion above. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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